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sorry, sir, can't speak much, voice is a bit shoddy and eye strain hurts a lot

will keep stream on for voices

these notes are from last night after reading them

Danica

Agos: vivid, palpable, true-to-life horror in first person | evident how Danica pushes the metaphor to the limit while the persona processes hard, bewildering questions | sharp glimpse into author's psyche | stanza 4 has good cuts

Ikaw at ang: absolute joy to read aloud, cadence almost freestyle thanks to its overall short construction, like laying red bricks on top of another and using grout | I wonder how "easy" this came to Danica, how off-the-cuff this feels when reading | bursting with passion, yet still tangible enough not to be lost in abstraction

2Taon2Tao: what seems to be a breakup poem for me morphs and changes shape in every line | stunning centerpiece metaphor with the sleep/wake clashing of ideas, as if imagined or "nasa utak ko lang 'yan" | last line kinda tricky still, even after multiple rereads; almost acts like a second title

Kim

Oyayi: on the page it looks typical, reads mellow, sounds smooth yet belies depth in meaning | at times coded and guarded (stanza 4), at times revelatory (stanza 3), but just vulnerable enough that the truth and the want (stanza 6) bleed through as one liquid

Sirena: rural milieu deployed effectively relative to length of poem | length also allows for more focused, personal vision and sound, as if a one-on-one conversation | freshwater mermaid is a fresh spin on the trope, really inventive | lines 7 to 9 are perfect climax, able to imply a mental dimension

Taguan: wonderful command of language, emblematic of her homely style | Kim knows how to process memories, pull from reality to spin up a snapshot of a small, familiar world | innocent enough, but broken masterfully by last line

Angela

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