Miscellaneous Fixes 6: Darker Fate

Aiko tooltip
>Pound ze fox pussy!
"Pound her fox pussy." because the furry babble-speak needs to go.

Pressing Back in the BodyPartEditor in the debug menu puts you back into the main debug menu instead of HACK STUFFZ.

In the Salon menu, switch Give Cum and Fuck Goblin.

In the Salon shop, rename Ext.Serum to Hair Serum for consistency with the item button name. Same with the dyes, they should be named the same as their item button names.

>Lynnette instructs you to take a seat and instructs her daughters to pare down your hair down to short length.
Repetition. My hair already was short as well.

>You no longer have a hair!
Why is it always this easy to tell what was added by Revamp?

>What beard style would you like?You tell Lynnette that you’d like to have your beard style changed to what you’ve indicated.
Spacing and a shitty cop out of not having to account for the choice you made. Both lazy coding and writing, the true epitome of Revamp.

>​Lynnette grabs a bottle and squirts a white fluid onto your chin and cheeks. You really hope it isn’t your payment. But it must not be, as within short order your new beard sprouts! es of blonde beard.
I think I'd have to list every other sentence of the bald and beard options, it might be better to just go through it in-code all in one go and fix it like that.

Stables scene.
>Before you even realize what you’re doing, you’ve turned around and placed your braced yourself against the side of the stall.

Isabella accent coaching.
>Isabella proudly says, “I think I’ve learned everything you have to teach, Testing.” You smile at the progress she’s made and applaud. There’s little else you can teach for her.
Only the last sentence should be bold.

>“No! I cannot see!” cries Isabella.Isabella is blinded!
The blinded message should be on a new line. Also axe one of the two empty lines before this one.

>“No! I cannot see!” cries Isabella.Isabella blinked!
That's not how that works. Cut this line completely and put the blinked part under the previous sentence.

>Isabella’s shield hits you hard enough to ring your ears and knock you onto your back with bruising force.  (65)
Double spacing and a space at the end.

I just encountered an imp overlord at the lake, when that definitely shouldn't be a thing as demons can't get near it. At the very least low level garbage like imps can't.

Izma recruitment.
>“I - you really think so?” Amily asks, looking stunned and pleased all at once,
Remove the space left of the hyphen.

>“Hey, come to think of it, if you’re a shark-girl - sorry, tigershark, then how are you going to survive out here?
Same here.

If you rape the incubus mechanic while a virgin, it puts the virginity loss message at the end of the scene instead of the moment of insertion.

Sand Mother scene.
>From the little bits you do here, it sounds like they're almost arguing over something...
"hear", not "here".

It look odd in the Perks menu to have it display as "Elven Bounty - Increases fertility by 0% and cum production by 250mLs." when you've only had the male cum production increase happen.

Is there a reason why Vapula's Sex menu options are disabled if you're not aroused enough instead of her Sex menu itself?

The options menu when creating a new character says "Back" in the bottom right. This needs to be changed to "Continue".

Intro.
>unfurling his wings to take flight and escape your meager reach.The imp says,
Missing space.

Whisker Fruit.
>Your skin flushes hot as images and fantasies assault  your mind.
Double space.

Random goblin.
>Your hymen is torn, robbing you of your virginity. Your twat is now a little loose.
Virginity loss message was stuck at the end of the scene instead of the point where it happens. It should happen after "With a few expert motions, she shoves it inside you, stuffing you full of artificial cock."

Giant bee loss.
>the world going comfortably dark as you lose your grip on consciousness.You feel quicker and stronger as the paralyzation venom in your veins wears off.
Missing space.

Marble.
>You open your mouth to make an indignant response, but Marble puts a figure on your lips to shush you.
Is "figure" an expression or something?

>“Without someone like you, I don't think things would have turned out this way. I...” she hesitates, “I'll stay with you at camp from now on!”
There is no mention of her joining you as a Lover at the end of this scene.

>You assure her that you feel the same, and at the moment, nothing else matters.Your hymen is torn, robbing you of your virginity.
Virginity line should be after "She pushes one end of it into your virgin, wet snatch and the other end into the folds of her own sex."

>The imp mutters something to himself. Before you have time to react the demonic creature’s hand is filled with a bright red fire that he hurls at you. The flames lick at your body leaving a painful burn on your torso, as well as an arousing heat in your groin.  (92)  (18)
An extra space before the damage indicator, an extra space before the lust indicator, and a third extra space after the lust indicator.

Vapula threesome with Izma.
>You tell to remove her cloth and turn around so you can have a clear view of her toned butt.
"cloth" should be "clothes", but Izma wears a grass skirt and not cloth.

Sheila.
>“... would you like that?
Remove the space.

If you've already had your fill of Ember's blood and she tells you no more for today, put the player back into her main menu instead of the camp.

Tamani's daughters tease you in a fight
> (1)  The display distracts you long enough to prevent you from taking advantage of her awkward pose, leaving you more than a little flushed. (2)
The tease damage indicator here is from a previous line displayed on the wrong one. It happens with every tease attack they can perform. There is also a space before the first tease damage indicator and one too many after it.

>The group of Tamani’s daughters readies themself and dashes back, getting some distance from you!
It feels odd for this encounter if they all collectively distance themselves from you. Might be fitting to make them only close in on you.

>You’ve knocked the resistance out of the group of Tamani’s daughters.You smile in satisfaction as the group of Tamani’s daughters collapses, unable to continue fighting.In spite of their injuries,
Repetition of "group of Tamani's daughters" and a missing space.

>The girls surges forwards, mobbing you from all sides.
Surge.

If you beat up Aiko the first time you meet her it asks "Will you rape her, and if so what will you do?" and presents a next button that doesn't  change the text and only leads to the actual choices.

Kitsune shrine.
>​The empty altar stands there, obviously missing the statue you took from it. You COULD put it back, if you wanted.
Not sure why that would need to be capitalized.

The Dullhan's talk options put you back into her main menu instead of her talk menu.

The Dullahan's "Back to Ingnam" talk option name is quite long, it could just be renamed to "Back Home".

Lumi's machine menu does not display anything but rounded numbers for length and width.

Edryn
>Coins exchange hands and her arm finds its way back inside your inquisitor’s robes,
Oy vey, they don't take coins in Mareth!

Manor.
>The beating sound intensifies, making you breathe deeply in anxiety. Something tells you that you should be well prepared before heading forward.
It says this as a room description despite the necromancer being dead.

>​At the end of this adjacent tunnel, you spot a faint pink light. You feel warm, just like you did when you first left Ingnam.
Same with this. Also, why would being near lethicite feel like going through a portal?

There is no dryad racial score.

Rathazul could mention at the end of his Vines scene that he will look into it for you and that he'll come to you if he finds something. I'm also not sure how long he's supposed to take, but it took over a week for him to come to me with the solution which is probably far too long.

>You see she is in perfect health. The black velvet alraune is currently wrapped up in your tail-coils!
Right. Tail-coils. The Squeeze and Release buttons are also needlessly far apart. Move Release to the second slot.

>Your prey pushes at your vines, twisting and writhing in an effort to escape from your grasp
There is no period at the end. It's a good idea to be explicit here and have it mention that she's unsuccessful.

>The black velvet alraune is currently wrapped up in your tail-coils!  (125) Tensing up, the obsidian vines bite into the black velvet alraune’s flesh.
There is a double space and the damage indicator should be at the end of this after "flesh". I know the damage indicator comes from the first sentence, but it's odd if the specific measure of which damage is dealt comes after it. The naga tail coil should also be checked for this.

>A slight blush shows on the plant-girl’s face. “Please fuck me,” she says, quietly.
A formatting/style preference, but the comma in the dialogue could be ellipsis instead.

After not drinking any Phouka whiskey for a time.
>The fuzzy, happy feeling ebbs away. The weight of the world’s problems seems to settle on you once more. It was nice while it lasted and you wouldn’t mind having another whiskey.
Two empty lines precede this.