fuck cirno isn't that stupid goddamn fuck asagpijagoja

The formatting in this is a bit weird. I assume that's just how whatever program you use to type trasmitted it, but it's fucking uggo and you should fix it. Whatever reference you were making with "loophole in the rule" is really obscure. Are you talking about spellcard rules? Fuck I don't know. I don't know why I expect people to understand that youkai barely eat humans in Gensokyo. And having Daiyousei get irritated at being called "Dai" might seem like a cute joke and a way to show off how much ~*~japanese~*~ you know, realistically, calling her Dai is a perfectly reasonable nickname because Daiyousei -is her fucking name and she shouldn't get pissed off about that-. Fuck.

I think those last three fics ruined me, man.

" "So Letty what is this thing?" Cirno asked, holding the bundle up for Letty to see. It was late autumn so Letty wasn't too deep into her sleep, so a bit of banging on her door woke her right up! She was grumpy and whacked Cirno in the head after opening her door but all was well as Cirno has a thick head. "

This line in particular is pretty poorly constructed. The image most people would get would be Cirno talking to Letty, and then Cirno pounding on Letty's door, and then Letty opening the door and smacking Cirno in the head. But that couldn't happen in that order because Cirno was obviously already talking to Letty face to face and etc. etc.

I do have to admit that the idea of Cirno handling a baby has potential to be cute and amusing. That's about the only redeeming thing here.

The next time you write you should hand off the idea to someone better than you and do something else because your writing level is below what I'd expect from a seventh grader and you're like fucking twenty.