[Whine-Subs]_La_storia_della_Arcana_Famiglia_-_01_[720p][E432A02F].mkv
Dialogue: 0,0:09:14.60,0:09:20.61,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,You have the 13th card, La Morte: Death.
Death and a God of Death are two different "beings."
While there are several Gods of Death, there is only one "Death." Please notice the fucking difference.

Fuck off.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Death_%28Tarot_card%29


Dialogue: 0,0:10:06.23,0:10:08.24,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Please do not touch the lady.{Oujo-sama}
Should've used Milady. Luca changing from "Milady" to "the lady" is fucking stupid.
And yes, you can use "Milady" while speaking to someone other than "Milady."

I don't see the issue here. Milady means "My Lady".

Dialogue: 0,0:12:14.92,0:12:22.12,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,As holder of the 21st card, Il Mondo: The World, I hereby swear
the World; it's a title.

While you did "catch" me on this, it's not an error you found. Rather, I didn't keep the standard consistent throughout the script. Arcana can be stylized as either "the World" or "The World", it's up to the editor to choose. I did choose what you like as the main standard, but this one slipped by me.


Dialogue: 0,0:12:55.36,0:12:56.85,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Marry the Princess? {Oujo?}
Marry the princess?
Dialogue: 0,0:15:11.47,0:15:15.32,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,You're robbing the Princess{Oujo} of her freedom.
You're robbing the princess of her freedom.
Dialogue: 0,0:18:32.17,0:18:37.84,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I'm sure every day would be fun if the Princess{Oujo} were my wife.
I'm sure every day would be fun if the princess were my wife.
Dialogue: 0,0:21:30.39,0:21:32.66,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,then the Princess{Oujo} will be free!
then the princess will be free!
Dialogue: 0,0:23:34.32,0:23:36.12,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It should be a lot of fun since it's just me and the Princess.
It should be a lot of fun since it's just me and the princess.


Half your fucking issues are with this, so I'm gonna address it right here. You can capitalize "Princess". This is gonna fucking blow your mind, but it's a goddamn nickname/title of respect. Do you know what you do in cases like these? You capitalize the fucking name. Fuck, you're thick.



Dialogue: 0,0:15:22.71,0:15:25.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Well done, Libertà the fool!
Well done, Libertà the Fool!

You only need to title it if he's going to use the term often, as a replacement for the guy's name. While on second thought I could see him using this throughout the series, it's not a technical error.



Dialogue: 0,0:15:38.05,0:15:42.06,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Then defeat me, right here, right now.
Then defeat me. Right here, right now.


If you're going to call me out on a comma splice, call me out on a *bad* comma splice. This was on purpose. Hell, I fucking talked about this yesterday before the release.

[08:53] <Minami_> that looks like a comma splice to me
[08:53] <Minami_> not wrong imo
[08:53] <Minami_> just a comma splice
[08:53] <Minami_> so you make the call when to use it (☞ﾟ∀ﾟ)☞
01[08:53] <Dark_Sage> Comma splices are fine in subs

Do you need me to explain why? Cuz it's an important lesson for editing.



Dialogue: 0,0:19:46.02,0:19:48.78,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I'm going to win this and take the title of "Papà".
I'm going to win this and take the title of "Papà."

No, no, no. My quotation style is British English because it makes more sense than American English. I've been over this time and time again.


Dialogue: 0,0:20:13.08,0:20:16.62,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,You {\i1}could{\i0} end up my bride...
You could end up as my bride...



What kind of fix is this? You just added in another word. It's not wrong, but it doesn't add anything besides a more formal speech style to the sentence.