Spectral Syndicate Nazism Grade.

Hey there, High Rank here.

	I've got a few things to say about your whole rant.

	These are just a few things so bear with me. I took speech class so I'm just going to point out a few things that took away from your paper and ultimately made me think less of your entire argument because of it. So you said you were speaking on our behalf.[1] So I mean unless you're our specifically designated speaker, which I'm pretty sure is already taken, then you can't make such claims.

	Another thing you need to be more credible. You said "SS - which(remove the which, it's unneeded) is similarly a Nazi term associated with Adolf Hitler's paramilitary organisation that provided security for the Nazi party meetings and whatnot.", which would have been much better with some sources that you did in fact use for the rest of your Essay.
Ex:[2] [3] [4] [5] [6] [7] [16] Forgive me if I missed any.

	You also lack evidence for many of your claims. for instance in the Julia section[8] you only had one point being that she seemed as if she was controlled. To make such accusations strong you need at least 3 supporting details and some credible sources(see section two) would be nice as well.
For example: I like apples. I like them because most are red.[9] I like them because they are nutritious.[10] I like apples because they grow on trees. [11]
One big mistake you made is saying "I personally think that this statement is again, unlikely to be even close to reality, but worth mentioning." in a Persuasive Essay, as it discredits yourself. For Essays meant to sway the decisions of people always say things as facts, just as I have in the above sections.

	Good use of sauce,[6] however I would teach the reader about said references and about Neo-Nazism.

	This would have been a great finishing argument[12] had you made it one section, the multiple lines of text make it seem more irrelevant than it actually is, for instance look at my section 3 compared to section 4, use of a bigger paragraph makes such statements seem more credible. Then this,[13] and this,[14] should have been a part of the closing (Don't use the term summary we as readers summarize, not the other way around. TLDR would have worked.) followed by the personal information. One thing that made me cringe was the "Irony:" part of the example[12] mentioned in this section. This shows a lack of effort in the Essay as a sentence such as "Ironically Noah is a homosexual which is the opposite belief that Adolf Hitler wanted to portray."

	Now on to the things you should NEVER do in a persuasive Essay is to put another person down, or give out information that can harm them intentionally. You pulled a Romney. If you payed attention to the 2012 elections after Mitt Romney put out an Anti-Obama campaign his publicity went more towards the negative side. So things like giving out personal information that can be used to find someone's personal property[You really think I would Sauce this? What are you crazy? That's Essay suicide.] and the whole... ASCII art[15] you included can take away even the most well thought out arguments.

	Here's the fun part. I decided to leave this at the end as a nice left hook that ends an intense boxing match. I am actually so liberal it hurts. Abortion? I'm for it. Equal rights for men, women, Whites, Blacks, Hispanics, Asians, gays, straights, Bi, asexual, pansexual, if you are one of those people who don't identify with either male or female or [Insert religion here]? Already signing petitions for it. Universal healthcare that's available in many other places in the world along with free college? It's just a little out of my paycheck anyways. So I've actually met and talked to Noah and one of the things he has not done is tried to offend anyone personally. That being said, when he found out that I was a Halfrican, Aethist, Liberal he just let up on the jokes. So had you asked him to lighten his humor a little it probably would have gotten done. Oh hold on... What did I mention there? Jokes? Humor? Comedians use things like Racism, Humor, and many other dark areas like dark humor before. So why attack someone over a game who's doing the same? One fact you seemed to miss while taking these negative facts was the multiple occasions that he said to be your own person and not to follow him if you so choose[sorry no sauce, he says this in his speeches at raids but I will update ASAP]. I myself am in this group to get better at coding, fighting, and to pass time, not to blindly follow. I respect your paper but it needs some work, until then, you get a D- and have fun in Anonymous.

	I am Spy4360, Rekkuza, and George Henry White IV. I am a single person. I forgive those who repent. I might forget some things unless I write them down. I expect you to clean up this Essay and give me something well thought out and worthy of myself to read, not Noah.



Sauce.
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