2019-07-31 Writing: adding details, student lounge

Greg Malivuk
gmalivuk@staffordhouse.com
http://www.pastebin.com/u/gmalivuk - Notes from all classes
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Homework: finish adding specific details to practice 4 (including p. 116).
1 My uncle is large.
- He can’t sit on the train chairs.
- He has size 13 shoes.
2 My boss has a beautiful house.
- He has 10 housekeepers.
- His house is 1000 square meters.
- He has a garden with flowers.
- He has an olympic sized swimming pool.
- I’ve never seen dust inside my boss’s house.
3 Our public library is nice.
- It has one million books. / It has 100,000 books.
- It is very clean.
- It has a lot of space to study. / There is a lot of space to study.
- It was designed by a famous Japanese designer.
- The air-conditioner is very good.
4 The inside of the taxicab is dirty.
- It smells like urine.
- The driver smells like he never takes a shower.
- There is gum stuck to the door handle.
- Ten cigarette butts are on the floor.
- Under the seat there are three cockroaches.
5 The student cafeteria is noisy and crowded.
- Kyori and Hyerin are fighting and seven students are trying to make them stop.
- I can’t hear my order number.
- One hundred people are talking loudly.
- I spend a lot of time in line.
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Practice 5 - This paragraph is boring!
With your group, add specific details and use descriptive words to make it more interesting.
	During last month’s college tour, I was very impressed with the student lounge at the dorm. The lounge was quite spacious. Many students can use it and move around easily. In the center, there were three luxurious, comfortable white couches.  To the left, there was a pool table under a light. Students can enjoy a game between studying. The lounge had a clean, well-organized kitchen. Students can cook delicious food there. Next to the kitchen, there was a long table where 12 or 14 people can sit to eat. There was a large new TV and a tidy study area with comfortable chairs. The student lounge was really beautiful and it was the best place I’ve ever been.
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p. 118 - To write about a place, you can start by listing everything in it, and then choosing an order and eliminating less important things.
p. 119 - Once you’ve decided on an order and the most important things, put the information in an outline.
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Homework: Write a descriptive paragraph about a room. Include descriptive language and specific details to give readers an image in their mind.