Dialogue Revision #1

Old:

"This evening is just what I needed, Ozma. I can't tell you how much I appreciate this and how much I appreciate your words of support," Cathy admitted as she took her last bite off her plate. Ozma was already reclining in his chair, having finished eating a few moments earlier. He got up and walked around to behind Cathy and began to massage her shoulders and neck. "Just let me take care of everything tonight. It's just you and me here and that's all you need to worry about now," Ozma said gently. Cathy tilted her head to rub Ozma's hand and arm with her cheek. She kissed his hand softly and firmly embraced it with one of her hands.

Revised:

"This evening is just what I needed, Ozma. I can't tell you how much I appreciate this and how much I appreciate your words of support," Cathy admitted as she took her last bite off her plate.

Ozma was already reclining in his chair, having finished eating a few moments earlier. He got up and walked around to behind Cathy and began to massage her shoulders and neck.

"Just let me take care of everything tonight. It's just you and me here and that's all you need to worry about now," Ozma said gently. Cathy tilted her head to rub Ozma's hand and arm with her cheek. She kissed his hand softly and firmly embraced it with one of her hands.