[mocha]
00:09:801 (3,4) - ctrl G, just because you want to put the styled slider first to match to song better.
00:11:449 (8) - make this look like 00:08:812 (8)
00:43:262 (2) - New combo, plus this line in the lyrics now (Starting) and later (Jumping) practically begs for a larger than normal jump.  Considering the whole song has no standard distance, it's a bit tough to bring this through, but what you shouldn't do is what you currently have:
00:58:757 (4,5,6,7,8) - in general, please take off grid snap on compressed streams
01:11:120 (1) - This being 1/6 is questionable.  Don't map questionable 1/6th rhythms, and especially don't end them on a purple tick.  Either take off 1 repeat or turn it in to 3 1/4ths.
01:11:614 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - map the whole drum roll?
01:15:240 (2,3,4,5) - ctrl G this and see how you like the rhythm.  There's actually nothing in the music at 01:15:240, but whatever.  It stands out now.
01:18:372 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1) - This stream is ugly.  Just turn off grid snap and do it right.
01:27:933 (9,10,1) - ctrl G

[kukil]
mostly rhythm stuff.  I don't care where you put the notes, just make the rhythms match the song better.
00:20:021 (4,5) - ctrl G
00:22:164 (8,1) - ctrl G
00:29:911 (8) - IDK what this is, but it doesn't match the song.  Look in the other difficulties for how they did it.
00:43:262 (1) - There's pretty much only 1 right way to map these lyrics, and that's a 1/2 or 1/1 slider on the red tick before the long white tick.  Remap the whole section to do this or it will play horribly.
01:25:790 (5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3) - the red ticks here are incorrect.  This section is 1/3, so there are no notes on the red ticks.  Just copy what Mocha did here
01:27:520 (7) - delete, this doesn't exist in the song.  Do your triple either earlier or later.
01:28:922 (8) - This is an ugly slider, just throwing that out there.

[insane]
00:07:164 (4,5,6,1) - make these 2 groups identical spacing.
00:10:131 (5,6) - This is better mapped as circle slider circle.
00:20:350 (1,2,3) - move this 1/2 backwards.
00:24:471 (4,5,6,7,8) - spacing??
00:31:230 (4) - weird rhythm for the slider
00:57:768 - You NEED a slider start here.  I suggest moving (4) to this spot and putting a note where (4) used to be.
01:00:735 (1,2,3) - This is completely unfair in any difficulty.
01:01:724 - Need a slider start here.  Also any other time there's a "JUMPING" or "STARTING" in the lyrics, you should probably map that with a slider.  See above for my suggestions to kukil
01:17:713 (1,2,3) - This is completely unfair in any difficulty.
01:24:142 - you need a slider start here
01:25:625 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Just copy what Mocha did here.
01:28:922 (6) - does this have to be an ugly slider?

[hard]
00:02:383 (3,4,5,6) - connect 3 and 4 with a slider.  Repeat that rhythm for the next section.  There's nothing wrong with repetition especially in a hard.
00:20:350 (3,4,5) - move back 1/2 note.
00:24:471 (7,1) - please use full spacing between these notes.  This is a hard and is already difficult enough to read.
01:25:625 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - What mocha did here is STILL easy enough for a hard.

[normal]
The biggest problem here is the random spacing.  PLEASE make sure that everything has consistent spacing unless it's 1/1 or longer between notes (where it doesn't matter)
00:11:779 - put something here...
00:24:471 (5,6,7) - this spacing looks awkward.  Can you redo this so it looks better and the sliders don't touch?
00:47:054 (3,4,1) - spacing!  This is what I want you do to at 00:24:471 (5,6,7), but make sure that 4 has proper spacing.
00:55:460 (3) - Spacing!
lots more spacing problems after this.  Go through and fix them.

[easy]
Easies aren't difficult.  Just please make sure you use consistent spacing.
There are 12 circles in this difficulty.  Please don't be afraid to use more.  In general, replace about 1/3rd of your sliders with circles and you'll have a fine map.
00:17:054 (6) - I don't like this slider.
00:44:581 (2) - this is snapped to 1/6.

[mp3]
As I said in the PM, just do another full submit after you replace the audio.  You will likely have to change the offset again on all difficulties though, so beware.

[claps]
Put these in your bookmarks (open the .osu file and paste them)
7164,7988,8482,9801,10625,11120,12109,12768,13427,14087,14746,15405,16065,16724,17383,18043,18702,19361,19856,20350,20515,21175,21257,21339,21422,21504,21587,21669,21751,21834,21916,21999,22658,23317,23977,24636,25295,25955,26614,27273,27933,28592,29251,29334,29911,30900,31394,31889,31971,33867,35186,36010,36504,37328,37823,38482,39142,39801,40131,40213,40295,40378,40790,41284,41779,41944,42356,42438,42521,42603,42686,42768,43757,44416,45076,45735,46394,47054,47713,48372,49032,49691,50350,51010,51669,52328,52988,53647,54306,54966,55625,56284,56944,57603,58262,58922,59004,59251,59581,59911,60240,60405,60653,60735,60817,60900,60982,61147,61230,61394,61477,61559,61642,62219,62878,63537,64197,64856,65515,66175,66834,67493,68153,68812,69471,70131,70790,71202,71284,71367,71697,71779,71944,72109,72191,72273,72356,72768,73427,74087,74746,74911,74993,75323,75405,75488,76065,76724,77383,78372,78455,78537,78620,78702,78784,78867,78949,79032,81010,81834,82328,82658,83647,84471,84966,85295,85625,85735,85845,85955,86065,86175,87109,87191,87273,87603,87686,87768,88098,88180

Then go through and see which notes fall on the bookmarks and put a clap there.  Essentially all I did was listen to the snare drum hit, or any high drum hit.  If there's not a note there, in higher difficulties consider putting one there.

If you need me to get whistles (bass hit) or finishes (cymbal crashes) I can, but the claps are probably more important now for you to get this sounding good.  Hopefully the 3 of you can figure out how to listen to the music to get music queues for hitsounds rather than just make it up as you go.