0:00:16.72	game-setting to game-changing? i've never heard game-setting in that context before
0:00:31.60 	typo/grammar - You made this old man so glad,
0:01:48.30 	grammar, on the bench
0:04:01.20 	grammar, used to say or used to be saying
0:04:20.20 	grammar, that way you won't miss the axis
0:05:30.42 	grammar, every once in a while
0:10:50.44 	'image of the songbirds singing their melodies in the morning?' i mean, イメージ kinda implies a visual depiction, so she'd be imagining the birds singing instead of directly the melody directly? i know later in the episode it's implied that she can actually see the music, but the viewer doesn't know that yet, it sounds kinda weird. also, songbirds.
0:13:04.17	i would go with 'piano-themed comic'
0:16:54.78 	make this 'want to go out', he's a more formal speaker?
0:21:15.39 	home run
0:21:15.39 	make her say 'the air' instead of 'wind' here, because that's what her coach told her - 'You will be able to hear the ball cutting through the air.' it would make sense for her to repeat that
0:25:52.52	home run
0:27:45.41	'it also came to light' sounds better