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Homura's Revenge #6 [Proofread]

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  1. Homura's Revenge #6 [Proofread]
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  3. Line 56: Besides, didn't Mami use to look after you too?
  4. Line 66: Whatever, we're both after that black-haired girl, anyhow. (Both with and without the comma before "anyhow" would work, I think.)
  5. Line 79: I don't want to team up with anybody either.. (Unless "nobody" was intentionally bad grammar)
  6. Line 86: Erm... Kyouko, right?
  7. Line 98: Honestly... I don't get her at all.
  8. Line 224: But isn't fighting two-on-one unfair?
  9. Line 228: Hey, you took the whole box! You're supposed to take only one!!
  10. Line 245: Them teaming up was outside of my expectations...
  11. Line 246: Sakura Kyouko... whom last time I assumed was Miki Sayaka's rival, tried to save her instead...
  12. Line 251: What if them teaming up was Kyubey's plan...
  13. Line 274: Did something happen to Miki-san...
  14. Line 324: So if she shuts out the pain, isn't she nearly invincible?
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