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From: Daraius Shevat
To  : Portius Windwhisper
Subj: The Lives of Etuo Shevat and Haralo Windwhisper
Date: 22 Klangiary, 384 CE
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Lord Windwhisper.

Please forgive my delay in returning this text to you. In the interest
of expedience, I will keep my commentary brief.

I have found it necessary to make only the smallest corrections, as
expected. While I find all of your work interesting, informative, and
well-written, this piece was of particular interest to me, concerned
as it is with a scion of the Shevat lineage.  My own family history --
outside of the public record of the Taint Wars and some documentation
of residency in Clarramore Cloud Gardens -- remains something of a
mystery to me, so I am beyond pleased that you have pieced together
even this small part of it. It is a shame the historical records are
so fragmented, as I would have eagerly devoured much more of this
tale.

My only suggestions are as follows:

The races of Etuo and Haralo are not made explicitly clear, though
given the demographics of our respective family, certain context clues
within the narrative, and general naming conventions, I infer that
Etuo was a lucidian, and Haralo a trill. If anything remains within
the records you unearthed that further elaborates on their physical
appearances, you might consider including these descriptions. It will
give readers a clearer picture of these paragons, and allow them to
relate more intimately with their stories.

Likewise, any additional information regarding the machines Etuo
constructed for the war effort would not be amiss! Perhaps it is
merely because my personal interest in Hallifaxian technological
prowess was piqued, but I found myself wanting to know just a little
more about the nature of Etuo's contributions.

Otherwise, I found the work engrossing and inspiring. I sincerely hope
it account of camaraderie and innovation will impel our citizens
towards greater civil service.

May you be well, and your efforts ever fruitful.

Ever yours in service,
~ Daraius Shevat

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