[Underwater] Ozma - 01 Timing Changes

[Underwater] Ozma - 01 Timing Changes

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:01:26.08,0:01:27.87,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Since the beginning,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:27.87,0:01:30.69,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,the Earth has undergone \Nmany such trials.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:01:26.08,0:01:27.44,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Since the beginning,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:27.44,0:01:30.69,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,the Earth has undergone \Nmany such trials.
Ending the first line at the end of the scene and bringing in the second line earlier just looks a lot better. Having it extend over a scene change and a short lead-in for the second line just doesn't feel good. This works and flows nicely because the second line is long and ties in with the following lines.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:01:38.57,0:01:41.81,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The land dries out, \Nthe oceans vanish,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:42.69,0:01:45.18,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,and vast seas of sand are born.
Dialogue: 0,0:01:45.53,0:01:51.67,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Most life survives only \Nunder threat of extinction,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:52.24,0:01:56.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,clinging to the thin \Natmosphere that remains.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:01:38.57,0:01:41.81,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The land dries out, \Nthe oceans vanish,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:42.69,0:01:44.70,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,and vast seas of sand are born.
Dialogue: 0,0:01:45.34,0:01:51.67,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Most life survives only \Nunder threat of extinction,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:52.08,0:01:56.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,clinging to the thin \Natmosphere that remains.
Second line lingers on much too long and close to the third line giving a blinking sub feel. End the second line earlier and give the third line a lead-in. Last line needed a lead-in as well.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:02:02.36,0:02:07.44,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Nonetheless, some struggle on,
Dialogue: 0,0:02:07.44,0:02:10.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,seeking out a tiny glimpse of hope...
Dialogue: 0,0:02:10.43,0:02:16.97,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,in the dry seas of sand.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:02:02.28,0:02:06.75,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Nonetheless, some struggle on,
Dialogue: 0,0:02:07.43,0:02:13.25,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,seeking out a tiny glimpse of hope...
Dialogue: 0,0:02:14.03,0:02:16.97,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,in the dry seas of sand.
This whole part is just poorly done overall. The translation is way too short for what is being said on screen which leads to having lines stay on for way past the dialogue; and having 2 second lead-outs just to join the lines doesn't work at all. I'd re-translate this part to fit in better overall with the actual dialogue.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:04:37.40,0:04:40.06,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,please don't make this difficult.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:04:37.40,0:04:40.41,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,please don't make this difficult.
Snap it to the end, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:04:59.19,0:05:01.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What the hell's going on?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:04:59.11,0:05:01.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What the hell's going on?
Snap it to the start, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:05:22.92,0:05:25.03,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Doppler radar's showing \Nsomething off the bow.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:05:22.67,0:05:25.03,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Doppler radar's showing \Nsomething off the bow.
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:05:27.65,0:05:28.39,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:05:27.34,0:05:28.39,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What?
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:05:28.62,0:05:30.36,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It's currently below ground,
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:05:28.39,0:05:30.36,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It's currently below ground,
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:05:50.09,0:05:51.28,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Hard to port!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:05:49.78,0:05:51.28,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Hard to port!
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:06:23.13,0:06:24.25,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Oh, crap!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:06:23.02,0:06:24.25,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Oh, crap!
As above.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:07:57.67,0:07:59.69,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,My name is Maya.
Dialogue: 0,0:08:00.10,0:08:03.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Um... Thank you for saving me.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:07:57.67,0:07:59.57,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,My name is Maya.
Dialogue: 0,0:08:00.10,0:08:03.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Um... Thank you for saving me.
Shorten the lead-out on first line to lessen the blinking sub look.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:09:29.98,0:09:32.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,This way, careful now...
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:09:29.71,0:09:32.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,This way, careful now...
Link to the starting key-frame, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:09:34.80,0:09:36.18,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Watch where you're going!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:09:34.59,0:09:36.18,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Watch where you're going!
As above.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:10:00.92,0:10:04.52,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,And here's our ship's mess hall.
Dialogue: 0,0:10:04.88,0:10:07.29,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,As always, it's pretty busy...
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:10:00.92,0:10:04.70,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,And here's our ship's mess hall.
Dialogue: 0,0:10:04.70,0:10:07.29,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,As always, it's pretty busy...
Extend the lead-out on the first line and lead-in on the second line to remove blinking sub effect.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:10:07.66,0:10:11.30,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The chef here's the best in Oase.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:10:07.29,0:10:11.30,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The chef here's the best in Oase.
Link to starting key-frame, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:10:45.88,0:10:50.94,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Say no more! You can have two sand lizard eggs. On the house!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:10:45.58,0:10:50.94,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Say no more! You can have two sand lizard eggs. On the house!
As above.

Scene Bleed #1 - 1 Frame Early Bleed
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:11:16.24,0:11:17.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Hey, stop pushing!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:11:16.28,0:11:17.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Hey, stop pushing!
So close boys, so close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:11:54.89,0:11:57.90,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Did you report to the captain?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:11:54.65,0:11:57.90,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Did you report to the captain?
Link to starting key-frame, it's close.

Excessive Lead-in
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:12:22.76,0:12:25.14,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,That'll do it.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:12:23.02,0:12:25.14,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,That'll do it.
Don't add a 500ms lead-in, please. Especially when it bleeds onto the next scene. You should have split it into two lines of "All right" and "That'll do it." or start the line on the next scene and ignore the first part of the dialogue which is just an idle response.

Awkward Lead-out
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:12:25.14,0:12:27.63,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Um... Thank you.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:12:25.14,0:12:27.51,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Um... Thank you.
The lead-out is too long to snap to the end-frame (which is actually another 400ms away) so end it slightly sooner so it doesn't flash off, then have the scene change following it.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:12:34.38,0:12:36.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Want a drink? \NYou'll feel better in no time!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:12:34.19,0:12:36.48,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Want a drink? \NYou'll feel better in no time!
Link to starting key-frame, it's close.

Key-frame Snap and Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:13:04.04,0:13:05.70,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,You're the worst.
Dialogue: 0,0:13:05.70,0:13:07.92,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I thought you were going out \Nto look for sand whales,
Dialogue: 0,0:13:07.92,0:13:10.60,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,but instead you've been \Npicking up chicks?!
Dialogue: 0,0:13:10.84,0:13:11.85,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It's not like that!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:13:04.04,0:13:05.70,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,You're the worst.
Dialogue: 0,0:13:05.70,0:13:07.34,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I thought you were going out \Nto look for sand whales,
Dialogue: 0,0:13:07.34,0:13:10.78,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,but instead you've been \Npicking up chicks?!
Dialogue: 0,0:13:10.78,0:13:11.85,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It's not like that!
End second line at key-frame, bring in third line to follow on, end third line later, bring fourth line in earlier. Linking lines aren't hard.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:13:13.84,0:13:16.44,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,She was being chased \Nby a Theseus Destroyer,
Dialogue: 0,0:13:16.78,0:13:20.32,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,and then an Ozma... \NA sand whale appeared...
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:13:13.84,0:13:16.60,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,She was being chased \Nby a Theseus Destroyer,
Dialogue: 0,0:13:16.60,0:13:20.32,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,and then an Ozma... \NA sand whale appeared...
Snap first line to the key-frame at the end and bring the second line earlier to link on.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:13:34.75,0:13:36.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I-It's not like that!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:13:34.50,0:13:36.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I-It's not like that!
Link to starting key-frame, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:14:00.40,0:14:02.18,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Wh-What are you talking about?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:14:00.06,0:14:02.18,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Wh-What are you talking about?
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:14:02.52,0:14:05.07,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What? I wasn't listening.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:14:02.19,0:14:05.07,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What? I wasn't listening.
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:14:13.14,0:14:15.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The military's \Ngoing to try and land.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:14:12.91,0:14:15.33,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The military's \Ngoing to try and land.
As above.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:14:32.10,0:14:33.32,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What're those?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:14:32.10,0:14:33.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What're those?
Snap to the end, it's close.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:15:13.90,0:15:16.22,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Your kind aren't welcome here!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:15:13.85,0:15:16.22,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Your kind aren't welcome here!
1 frame away from the key-frame...

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:15:16.55,0:15:18.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Damn straight! Get the hell out!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:15:16.22,0:15:18.43,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Damn straight! Get the hell out!
Snap to the start, it's not that far off.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:15:40.66,0:15:43.41,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,For the military to \Ncome out this far...
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:15:40.41,0:15:43.41,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,For the military to \Ncome out this far...
Snap to the start, it's not that far off.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:16:08.28,0:16:10.49,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,That was quite the entrance.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:16:08.28,0:16:10.78,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,That was quite the entrance.
Snap to the end.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:16:14.78,0:16:16.37,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Are you the captain?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:16:14.78,0:16:16.78,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Are you the captain?
Snap to the end.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:16:17.02,0:16:19.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,We've received information
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:16:16.78,0:16:19.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,We've received information
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:16:22.86,0:16:26.13,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I don't know what \Nyou're talking about.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:16:22.75,0:16:26.13,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I don't know what \Nyou're talking about.
Snap to the start. Come on guys, this is like basic work. It's like 4 frames off the key-frame.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:16:26.46,0:16:29.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Lower the plank. \NThat's a military order!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:16:26.13,0:16:29.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Lower the plank. \NThat's a military order!
Snap to the start.

Scene Bleed #2 - 1 Frame Early Bleed
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:18:12.09,0:18:14.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What? What are they doing?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:18:12.11,0:18:14.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What? What are they doing?

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:18:27.24,0:18:29.50,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Get to work, men!
Dialogue: 0,0:18:29.52,0:18:30.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Aye aye!
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:18:27.24,0:18:29.50,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Get to work, men!
Dialogue: 0,0:18:29.50,0:18:30.38,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Aye aye!
1 frame off...

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:19:36.22,0:19:37.44,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The Doppler radar!
Dialogue: 0,0:19:37.44,0:19:39.69,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,We're picking up something \Naround the sand pirate ship!
Dialogue: 0,0:19:40.06,0:19:40.65,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:19:36.22,0:19:37.44,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The Doppler radar!
Dialogue: 0,0:19:37.44,0:19:40.01,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,We're picking up something \Naround the sand pirate ship!
Dialogue: 0,0:19:40.01,0:19:40.65,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What?
Extended lead-out on second line and extended lead-in on third line so that it links.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:19:48.68,0:19:51.16,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It matches the \NFFT curve of the QTF.
Dialogue: 0,0:19:51.17,0:19:52.62,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,They're perfectly identical.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:19:48.68,0:19:51.16,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,It matches the \NFFT curve of the QTF.
Dialogue: 0,0:19:51.17,0:19:52.62,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,They're perfectly identical.
1 frame off...

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:20:29.26,0:20:30.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Looking good.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:20:29.04,0:20:30.40,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Looking good.
Snap to the start boys.

Linking Error
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:20:36.54,0:20:37.88,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Aye aye!
Dialogue: 0,0:20:37.90,0:20:41.13,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Quantum transition engine \Noutput set to maximum.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:20:36.54,0:20:37.90,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Aye aye!
Dialogue: 0,0:20:37.90,0:20:41.13,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Quantum transition engine \Noutput set to maximum.
Everything matters, even that 2ms.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:20:47.50,0:20:48.73,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What is this?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:20:47.14,0:20:48.73,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,What is this?
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:20:52.27,0:20:57.36,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I'm running the survey radar's \Nfluctuation pattern through a dip filter.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:20:51.89,0:20:57.36,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I'm running the survey radar's \Nfluctuation pattern through a dip filter.
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:21:20.34,0:21:21.57,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Did you hear me?
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:21:20.25,0:21:21.57,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Did you hear me?
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:21:31.62,0:21:35.56,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Enemy targeting laser \Nhas locked on to our stern.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:21:31.35,0:21:35.56,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Enemy targeting laser \Nhas locked on to our stern.
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:21:44.49,0:21:45.79,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Trim 45.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:21:44.28,0:21:45.79,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Trim 45.
Snap to the start.

Key-frame Snap
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:24:07.23,0:24:08.92,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The boundary phase \Nhas gone underground.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:24:07.00,0:24:08.92,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The boundary phase \Nhas gone underground.
Snap to the start.

Scene Bleed #3 - 2 Frame Extended Bleed
Original
Dialogue: 0,0:24:07.00,0:24:08.92,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The boundary phase \Nhas gone underground.
Changed
Dialogue: 0,0:24:07.00,0:24:08.84,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,The boundary phase \Nhas gone underground.
This one was really easy to spot.