tonde_yuruyuri_04v1

------------------Log for: [Tonde] Yuru Yuri ♪♪ - 04 [720p] [10-bit] [A0F9067F]-------------------

This is a small log, listing possible mistakes.
Please keep note that I'm only reading through the script and not watching the anime.




For the kara (op), on the dasshu dasshu part, the first "dasshu" is split like 'da' + 'sshu' while the rest are split like 'das' + 'shu.'


Dialogue: 0,0:02:44.11,0:02:47.31,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I heard there's ten times more pollen in the air compared with last year.

	-"there are" or "there is"?


Dialogue: 0,0:10:28.03,0:10:31.76,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Ayano-chan bought that pudding as a present for Toshinou-san,
Dialogue: 0,0:10:31.76,0:10:35.86,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,in order to express her feelings! It's very important to her!

	-"in order" is a subordinating conjunction. No commas precede them.


Dialogue: 0,0:10:41.63,0:10:43.63,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,I'll hold back this once.

	-just this once?


Dialogue: 0,0:12:09.32,0:12:14.24,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Such a minuscule detail means nothing \Nwhen compared to the vastness of this sky.

	-Take the "a" out in the beginning.


Dialogue: 0,0:12:47.54,0:12:50.20,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Furutani, try asking; "what time is it?"

	-There must be a way of taking that awkward semi-colon out.


Dialogue: 0,0:17:30.93,0:17:32.42,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,T-That's...

	-Stutter... "Th-That's" Why? cuz that's how it sounds.


Dialogue: 0,0:20:14.72,0:20:18.64,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Last year on my birthday, one of my friends...

	-Last year, on my birthday, one of...


Dialogue: 0,0:20:32.44,0:20:36.89,Default,,0000,0000,0000,,Just because you want it, doesn't mean the recipient wants it too.

	-comma before "too." lines 55 and 66 had them. Also, I see you have a comma for "Just because...," so why doesn't line 117 have it?




-LeonHo 07/25/2012