~Coming off an earlier convo~

<Dark_Sage> "Again, why?!" is not really a line. It'd be phrased "Again? Why?!"
<Rem> No, no
<Rem> I know it's awkward
<Rem> But hear me out.
<Dark_Sage> Sure
<Rem> dakara dande doesn't not mean Again? Why?!
<Rem> It basically means "As I've said/as I was saying, why?!"
<Rem> Something along those lines.
<Rem> it's basically her fukou da moment
<Dark_Sage> "Oh, come on!" would suffice with a character that speaks like that? (not her, obv)
<Rem> Yeah, something like that.
<Rem> That's the idea.
<Dark_Sage> so would "This again?!" work?
<Rem> You point makes sense, as in
<Rem> Again? (These weird orders again)
<Rem> Why?!
<Rem> But that's not obvious right away.
<Rem> And yeah
<Rem> That's work, but
<Rem> I guess they wanted to keep the "why" in there.
<Rem> Since she repeats it all the time.
<Rem> Like, what
<Rem> four times in the episode
<Dark_Sage> "Why this again?!"
<Dark_Sage> But perhaps I'm missing something. It's split up, right?
[<Rem> Nah
<Rem> There's just a pause.
<Rem> dakara is literally "therefore"
<Rem> but it's part of the same line
<Dark_Sage> So would "Why this again?!" be the ideal phrasing?
<Rem> I just noticed that you got the wrong idea about the line and made three paragraphs unrelated.
<Rem> I suppose
<Rem> That line isn't all that crash hot either.
[<Rem> heh
<Rem> It's a fairly awkward line to handle.
<Dark_Sage> If it still sounds bad, I'll revamp it.
<Dark_Sage> Basically I just need to include "why" and "again" in the same line, right?
<Rem> The "why" is crucial, in this case.
<Rem> But she doesn't refer to any actual event repeating.
<Dark_Sage> "Why me?!"
<Rem> She's just repeating her concern.
<Rem> Hm, that could work.
<Rem> Their main goal was to split the lines up.
<Rem> So that's why they handled the line as they did.
<Dark_Sage> "Why is this..."  "happening to me?!"
<Rem> Hm
<Rem> That makes sense, sure.
<Rem> That's about right.
<Dark_Sage> I can make it shorter with "Why..." "is this happening?!"  with the 'is this' being placed on either line, depending on the timing.
<Dark_Sage> Or I can keep it with the slightly longer one.
<Dark_Sage> Which is best?
<Rem> I like both, but perhaps splitting the lines up into even word count would be best.
<Rem> She says two short words, so one long line and one short one would raise eyebrows.
<Dark_Sage> "Why is..." "this happening?!"
<Rem> Yeah, that could work.
<Rem> That's probably ideal.
<Dark_Sage> All right, cool. I'll go edit my review. Thanks for setting me down the right path.
<Rem> it's coo