0:00:03.17  line is rather long; we saw ourselves forced --> we were forced
0:01:12.72  sounds weird, I'd make it just [Ready?]
0:05:03.76  the way this is worded sounds like an insult to ranko rather than criticism of tatsuhiko. i'd go with [But in the end, she was a spare to him!]
0:05:28.64  [That's... what's so hard!] makes more sense considering line 111
0:06:08.57  [Not only mastering a magic ball, but also how to skip out on practice.]
0:06:50.67  making --> throwing
0:06:54.45  [If I play with this mindset...]
0:08:06.41  [At this point...]
0:09:11.27  [If needed, the two of you could appoint a time to me-]
0:12:18.51  giant stag beetle
0:13:47.33  [You'd think that it'd be best if it \Njust kept moving straight ahead, right?]
0:13:51.03  [But if instead it curves, and stops for a moment...]
0:13:54.04  [That's when it shows its strengths.]
0:13:57.47  [Right now, aren't we...]
0:13:59.46  [... just like an unpredictable magic ball, I wonder?]
0:14:32.37  i would put the "were" from the next line at the end of this line to take a little weight of it, so [This summer, we were...] and then remove the "were" from the start of the next one
0:16:43.11  [Let's show it off!]
0:16:51.33  remove the "like this"
0:17:47.75  this is kinda awkward because the expression apparently means "unfounded rumour", but that doesn't really fit. in any case, i would make it [Where did you hear that?]
0:17:50.44  remove "I guess"
0:18:04.79  it's "to leave for something", as opposed to "to", right? so, to --> for
0:19:16.66  [For him...]
0:19:18.98  [... time has been standing still for a long while now.]
0:20:16.63  {\i1}You're connected to the answering mach-{\i0}
0:20:55.64  [I wrote an expiration date one these...]
0:21:42.88  [So you...]
0:21:45.34  [... might be able to see this face.]
0:22:16.60  and ine after that: we always put commas outside of quotes
0:24:11.26  isn't it "every day" in this case?
0:24:36.36  there's a space after that \N
0:24:46.85  18th
0:24:49.70  first-timers
0:25:03.95  line is long, [They will overwhelm them.]
0:25:33.43  remove "rather"