2019-11-20 Writing: adding details

Greg Malivuk
gmalivuk@staffordhouse.com
http://www.pastebin.com/u/gmalivuk - Notes from all classes
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Homework (to start in class): complete practice 4 on p. 115-116 (number 2, 3, 4, 5)
2 My boss has a beautiful house.
- There is special art in the house.
- He changed his house into marble.
- They have a chandelier in the main entrance.
- There are floor-to-ceiling windows with a wonderful view.
3 Our public library is nice.
- They have a Harry Potter collection across the main entrance.
- It is spacious and has a lot of books.
- They have a special place with green lamps and desks to study.
- All of the staff are kind and helpful.
4 The inside of the taxicab is dirty.
- There is a lot of food and trash.
- The driver spilled coffee on the seat.
- It smells like old cigarette smoke.
- There are a lot of insects and lizards.
5 The student cafeteria is noisy and crowded.
- The entire football team and all the cheerleaders are eating.
- Students are having a dance party.
- There are free donuts for everybody.
- You have to yell for your friends to hear you.
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p. 116 - This paragraph about the lounge is super boring.
Rewrite it with more specific and descriptive language to make it more interesting.
During last month’s college tour, I was very impressed with the student lounge at the dorm. The lounge was quite spacious. Many students can use it and move around easily. In the center, there were three luxurious, comfortable white couches.  To the left, there was a pool table under a light. Students can enjoy a game between studying. The lounge had a clean, well-organized kitchen. Students can cook delicious food there. Next to the kitchen, there was a long table where 12 or 14 people can sit to eat. There was a large new TV and a tidy study area with comfortable chairs. The student lounge was really beautiful and I’m sure I will enjoy using it.
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p. 118-119
To write about a place, you can start by listing everything in it.
Then choose which things are most important and decide on the best space order.
Then you can break up the things into sets and write an outline.
Finally, write a paragraph about the place.
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The transition signals in a space-order paragraph will often be prepositions of location, like the ones on p. 112 and in the lecture hall example.
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Homework: prepare and write a paragraph about a room in your home in your own country.