OH GOD I MADE AN OC *rewrite*

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NOTICE
lower down is a grammar corrected version that was made by someone else.
even though it is over all better, when i dictated with dragon it got words wrong that i didn't catch, which also made them grammar correct it wrong in some places... when i feel like dicking around with it, ill fix the grammar corrected one to better fit what it should be, the non grammar correct isn't getting touched.

further below that is the new version that i rewrote. i read the original and the one the person did and still didn't like the outcome much.
original line 12
some else rewrite 122
my rewrite 219
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>You are anonymous
>and you are one rich mother fucker
>about four years ago you won the lottery
>$63 million to be exact
>to be honest you are happy at the time
>and right now
>well still fucking happy
>but because when you one them money
>everybody in your family
>every friend you had
>every person who thought you old them in God damn thing came to the door asking for their share
>so you cut ties completely with your family
>you cut ties completely with your friends
>and you made damn sure to make your presence unknown anybody who wants knew you
>you went so far see them legally change your name the most unsuspicious thing you could possibly >think of
>anonymous
>well to be exact
>anonymous thee unknown
>now ever since you were a kid you've always like animals
>but there's one animal that you've always wanted to have
>just never had the space for
>so about 3 1/2 years ago
>you got a horse
>you being the creative mother fucker that you are
>name that after character in a videogame that you happen to like
>epona
>God dammit did you love Zelda
>that was fun having a horse to
>you had a mansion
>you had a stable
>you had a well-stocked library
>and with some money left over you bought damn near every piece of entertainment you possibly >could
>and when you couldn't get your hands on legally you pirated
>home theater room
>newest consoles
>a computer with four Titans
>and a computer with 4 7990's
>best of both worlds depending on which gameplay better on what
>and thanks to your big home and land you magic put up solar panels in so many places you are >basically off the grid
>so long as you had anon cloudy day and the batteries charged
>you only One room completely powered in with your seating done through electrical it was really like >you're living in one room but you had the solar panels of a whole neighborhood
>outside of taking care of Epona your days consisted mostly of playing video games
>watching some classic and new movies
>catching up on old TV shows
>and taking a ride on Epona every now and then
>right now you're taking a ride along your property
>Epona is going about as fast as she can
>but all that kind of goes the hell
>a big bright white light envelops you and your entire estate
>and you are fucking out
- - -
>you don't exactly know when you came to
>you where wear a watch
>since you have never had anything to do you never really saw much use in owning one
>not that you didn't think the grand complication to be pretty interesting to own
>ahhh you're getting off on a tangent
“the fuck happened”
>“I have no idea”
>okay someone responded,
>your properties a good 3 miles away from any form of civilization
>your closest neighbor is at least 2 miles away
>someone's trespassing
>so you look around
>you see the woods that wasn't there before
>vibrantly colorful at that
>but you don't see another person
“who said that”
>“I did”
>again you look around
>“wait you can understand me now”
>and then you see it
“a pony”
>“there are pony anymore I'm a horse”
>it starts the standup
>you do the same
>“AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH”
>okay this thing is really loud
>“why the hell I short”
>you don't get an answer for that
“who and what the hell are you”
>you might be in the back of your mind but you don't thinking it yet
>you don't want to believe that it's possible
>but could be
>and that's what kind of scares you
>“I'm Epona, a horse... pony... whatever and your my master don't you remember that, wait you fell off me did you hit your head hard?”
>It goes into apologizing making you fall off
>saying the bright lights scared
>you don't know what to make of the situation right now
>one thing is for sure though
>you hit your head very fucking hard
>and that's why you hear another set of voices
>“come on girls, the light came from this direction”
>“I see something twilight, a big house in a large cleared out area”
>who the hell are they and why the hell are they coming your property
>you look towards the forest where the voices are coming from
>seriously how the hell did that forest get there
>anyways
>you see a purple pony with a horn
>in the blue one with wings
>and then you see green
>your nose hurts
>thank you trying to faint
>I think you're succeeding
>“what is i...”
>And with that you're out

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someone grammar corrected it so here
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>You are Anonymous .
>And you are one rich motherfucker.
>About four years ago you won the lottery.
>$63 million to be exact
>You were happy at the time.
>And right now?
>Well, still fucking happy.
>But when you won the money, everybody in your family, every friend you had, every person who thought you owed them one Goddamned thing came to the door asking for their share.
>So you cut ties completely with your family.
>You cut ties completely with your friends.
>And you made damn sure to make your presence unknown anybody who wanted to know you.
>You went so far as to legally change your name to the most inconspicuous thing you could possibly think of...
>Anonymous
>Anonymous Unknown to be exact.
>Now, ever since you were a kid you've always liked animals.
>But there's one animal that you've always wanted to have but never had the space for.
>So about 3 1/2 years ago you got a horse.
>Being the creative motherfucker that you are, you name it after a character in a vidyagaem that you happen to like.
>Epona
>God damn do you love Zelda.
>That game was so dicking good.
>It was fun having a horse too.
>You had a mansion.
>You had a stable.
>You had a well-stocked library.
>And with some money left over you bought damn near every piece of entertainment you possibly could.
>Home theater room? Check.
>Newest consoles? Check.
>A computer with four Titans? Check.
>A computer with 4 7990's? Check
>Best of both worlds depending on which game played better on what
>Thanks to your big home and huge amount of land you are able to put up solar panels in so many places you are basically off the grid.
>Well, so long as you had no cloudy days and the batteries were charged.
>you only One room completely powered in with your seating done through electrical it was really like you're living in one room but you had the solar panels of a whole neighborhood
>Other than taking care of Epona, your days mostly consisted of playing video games, watching some movies, catching up on old TV shows.
>Right now you're riding Epona along your property.
>Epona is going about as fast as she can.
>But all that kind of goes the hell.
>A bright white light envelops you.
>And you are fucking out.
- - -
>You don't exactly know when you came to.
>Since you have never had anything to do you never really saw much use in owning a watch.
>Not that you didn't think the grand complication to be pretty interesting to own
>...You're getting off on a tangent
“ Ughh, the fuck happened?”
>“I have no idea."
>Okay, so someone responded.
>There are two things wrong with that:
>1) Your property's a good 4 miles away from any form of civilization.
>2) Your closest neighbor lives 2 miles away.
>Someone is trespassing.
>You look around.
>you see a forest that wasn't there before.
>A vibrantly colored forest at that.
>You don't see another person though.
“Who said that?”
>“I did.”
>Again you look around.
>“Wait, you can understand me now?”
>And then you see it.
“A pony?”
>“There are no ponies here, I'm a horse.”
>It starts to stand up.
>You do the same.
>“AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”
>Holy fuck, this thing is loud!
>“Why the hell am I short!?”
>You don't have an answer to that.
>You do, however, have a question.
“Who and what the hell are you?”
>An answer starts forming in the back of your mind.
>You don't want to believe that it's possible.
>Could it be?
>“I'm Epona, a horse... pony... whatever, and you are my master. Don't you remember that? Or did you hit your head... some... where. Crap.”
>It starts apologizing profusely for making you fall off, saying the bright lights scared it.
>You don't know what to make of the whole situation right now.
>One thing is for sure though.
>You hit your head very fucking hard.
>That's probably why you're hearing another set of voices.
>“Come on girls, the light came from this direction!”
>“I see something Twilight, a big house in a large clearing!”
>Who the hell are they, and why the hell are they coming on to your property?
>You look towards the forest where the voices are coming from.
>(Seriously, how the hell did that forest get there?)
>Emerging from it, you see a purple pony with a horn, a blue one with wings and-
>Your nose hurts.
>You think you're seeing a bit of green too.
>Are you fainting?
>Fuck
>“What is i...”
>And with that you're out.

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>You are Anonymous.
>You happen to be one rich motherfucker.
>Four years ago, you won the state lottery which came to $63 million after tax.
>After winning, you were happy at the time.
>But right now?
>Well... you are still pretty fucking happy.
>However, what came with all the money was a new set of problems.
>Everybody in your family,
>Every friend you had,
>Every person who thought you owed them in god damn thing came to your door asking for their share.
>So you cut ties completely with your family, your friends, and all of your old acquaintances.
>You made damn sure to make your presence unknown anybody who knew you, or even wants to know you.
>You went so far see them legally change your name the most unsuspicious thing you could possibly think of.
>Anonymous, to be exact, Anonymous Thee Unknown.
>Ever since you were a kid you've always like animals, but most of the ones you really wanted required space you just couldn't afford.
>About half a year after getting your winnings, you got your space, and along with it, a horse.
>Being the creative mother fucker that you are you named her after a character in a videogame that you love.
>Epona.
>Dammit, you love the Zelda games.
>You had a mansion, a stable, a well-stocked library, and with some money left over you bought damn near every piece of entertainment you possibly could.
>When you couldn't get your hands on what you wanted legally, you pirated it.
>a personally designed home theater room, the newest consoles, several computers with the best hardware you could put in them, for when something works better on AMD or Nvidia, you got the best of both worlds.
>And thanks to your big home being new, you manage to get solar panels put damn near everywhere and on everything you could.
>You are now living pretty much off the grid.
>So long as you didn't have too many cloudy days, and the batteries were fully charged at least.
>You also happen to basically live out of one room, so really you are powering one room, with the same amount of panels it would take to power a neighborhood.
>You may be a multimillionaire, but that doesn't mean you shouldn't think of the earth...
>Does that sound like lies to you too?
>Ok, really you didn't want to trust your homes power to the electric companies exclusively.
>Sure, they may be able to do their job 99.9% of the time, but you have lived through tornado areas where power will be out for hours if not days, you have lived in areas where power would just cut out for a minute every now and than...
>You didn't want to trust your food, and things in your care to elements you couldn't have some modicum of control over, and battery backups were the best way to do that.
>Outside of taking care of Epona, your days consisted mostly of playing video games, watching some classic and new movies, catching up on old TV shows, and taking Epona out for a ride every now and than
>It's fun for you, and she seems to enjoy the time too.
>Right now, the two of you are racing across your property going about as fast as she can.
>Loud noise, a crash, and a bright light envelop everything you hold dear, once it overtakes you, you lose consciousness.
- - -
>The next thing that you know, you are waking up.
>Not having any idea how long you were out for makes you wish you wore a watch.
>Sure most of the time it's useless, everything you own has some form of a clock on it, but still.
>With that said, it's not like you didn't have your eyes on a grand complication, though something costing that much is just s show piece...
>You may be rich, but you aren't lighting Cuban cigars with 1000$ notes rich yet.
>Ahhh you're getting off on a tangent.
“What the fuck just happened” you say rubbing your head.
>“I have no idea.”
>That made you stop.
>Someone responded to you.
>Your property is 3 miles away from civilization, 2 miles away from the nearest neighbor.
>Someone must be trespassing.
>Looking around you see a heavily wooded area that wasn't there before and it's vibrantly colored at that.
>But you don't see another person.
“Who said that?” you ask, the fact you are losing your patients is evident.
>“I did.”
>You look around again, and see nothing.
>“Wait you can understand me now.”
>That sentence caught your attention, looking behind you, you see it...
“A pony?”
>“I'm not a pony anymore, I'm a horse.”
>Lying on its side, it starts to get up causing you to do the same.
>“AAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”
>Okay, well, this thing is a bit on the loud side.
>“Why the hell am I so short?”
>Well... what can you say to that?
You ask the most pressing question on your mind back “Who..." you look it over "...better yet, what the hell are you?”
>You begin to feel you know the answer, but it's just not coming forward yet, but it's there, you just don't want to believe that it's possible
>But could it be?
>Now that's a thought that scares you.
>“I'm Epona, a horse... pony... whatever and your my master. Don't you remember that... wait you fell off me, didn't you? OH GOD, did you hit your head hard?”
>She then goes off on a wild tangent about how the bright light scared it, pressing into you, knocking you over again, but all this made one thing clear.
>You probably hit your head pretty fucking hard.
>It's probably for the best if you return home and call an ambulance.
>As you get up for the second time, you hear several other voices.
>“Come on girls, the light came from this direction.”
>They seem to be coming from the forested area.
>“I see something twilight," this voices origin appears to be coming from above you "a big house in a large cleared out area.”
>Nothing good ever came from people coming on your property.
>You look towards the forest where most of the voices are coming from.
>Seriously, how the hell did that forest get there?
>That thought is cut short with the visage of a purple pony with a horn coming from the forest.
>Once it is fully out, a blue one lands slightly in front of it.
>And then you see green.
>Your nose hurts.
>If I am correct, my body is trying to faint.
>You believe it to be succeeding.
>“What is i...”
>And with that, you're out.