QUIK CRITS

Roget	You busy?
18:20	Quikngruvn	For certain values of Busy. Whatcha got?
18:20	Roget	Wanted to get feedback on a 001 I've been working on.
18:21	Quikngruvn	Lay it on me. I need to think about something else right now.
18:21	Roget	http://scpsandbox2.wikidot.com/rogetbox
18:21	Roget	Happy to assist in distraction
18:27		Roget prods quik
18:27	Quikngruvn	'k. I like the idea, but something about putting its whole history in like that bugs me.
18:27		Quikngruvn ponders what would be better. This may take a while.
18:27	Roget	ALright. What did you like about it?
18:28	Quikngruvn	The concept, the history, the current situation.
18:29	Roget	What if I pushed the history back, cut portions out, and added a more precise description of the composition in the beginning of the description.
18:30	Quikngruvn	I... hmmm.
18:31	Quikngruvn	...I wonder if you could present the history primarily through reports/memoes/notes instead of as a block of text in the description.
18:31	Roget	That could be cool. Maybe have a more garbled thing in a collapsable a la sandrewswanns proposal?
18:32	Quikngruvn	Like, a (part of a) memo authorizing the initiation of the project, another for results of phase I?
18:32	Quikngruvn	I don't think you need anything garbled. The insinuation you have with what you've got should be fine.
18:33	Roget	Alright. Moving the history into the notes would also mean making the description shorter/different
18:34	Quikngruvn	Yeah, but I reckon you could get away with a two-paragraph description, and long as it's complete enough.
18:35	Roget	Alright, thanks. This has been most useful. Can I show it to you again after I've worked on it a bit more?
18:35	Quikngruvn	But yeah, that's really the only thing that I'd change-- break up/spice up/immerse the reader in the history of the thingie.
18:35	Quikngruvn	Sure. I'd like to see this succeed.
18:35	Quikngruvn	And you're welcome.
18:35	Roget	Aight