BRS

[WhyNot]
1:10 - Error(minor, recurring) / "Fantasy blue sea of the sky."　「絵空」 is not really a word, but it's part of 「絵空事」(fantasy) and it works as a wordplay with 「空」(sky).
3:37 - Error(minor) / "I don't want to talk to you anymore." OR "I don't talk to lunatics."
7:59 - Error(minor) / "I wouldn't mind curry!" Curry is not considered to be "light".
11:51 - Liberal(minor) / "Thanks for having me." "I had fun" is in no way acceptable here in context. Even MC can't be that insensitive.
20:20 - Error(minor on important line = major) / "of colors..." Color was a major theme. "iro" here in context is not short of another "ironna".


[Commie]
1:10 - Error(minor, recurring) / "Fantasy blue sea of the sky."　「絵空」 is not really a word, but it's part of 「絵空事」(fantasy) and it works as a wordplay with 「空」(sky).
3:17 - Error(minor) / "The game where you tie a thin chain around a bird's leg and let it fly around like a balloon."
3:37 - Error(minor) / "I don't want to talk to you anymore." OR "I don't talk to freaks."
5:49 - Error(minor) / "W-Wow, that's such a clever name!"
6:52 - Error(minor) / "Really? I don't really have any." OR "Really? I don't get what you mean."
7:12 - Literal(minor) / "Aiyo"???
7:43+07:45 - Error(minor) / "You'll feel better after throwing up." + "I hate throwing up." Hard to believe, but it's probably a way to feel better for track teams?
9:57 - Context / "this is Yomi's doing."
11:07 - Context(arguable) / "This one's for you."
11:36 - Liberal(minor) / "I'm not saying anything."
18:42 - Error(minor) / "it won't bleed or hurt from festering."

[AsukaSubs-SubDESU]
1:03 - Scriptwriting / "What reflects in the sea..."
1:10 - Error(minor, recurring) / "Fantasy blue sea of the sky."　「絵空」 is not really a word, but it's part of 「絵空事」(fantasy) and it works as a wordplay with 「空」(sky).
2:41 - Error / Are you guys serious?
3:13 - Style(minor) / "Kotoriasobi" is a family name, so it shouldn't be split.
3:21 - Context(arguable) / "She has so many colors." Same girl.
3:30 - Consistency(recurring) / vs 3:13, Stick to "Kotoriasobi" or "Little bird play"
3:43 - Style(minor) / What the fuck is this TL note?
5:49 - Error, Logic / "[...] in Takanashi." Just because you write a TL note doesn't mean you can completely ignore the term in the script. At least write the Japanese word or better, "in places with no hawks."
6:22 - Context, Logic(minor) / "Why are you telling {\i1}me{\i0} that?", she did not ask either.
6:49 - ???(major on negligible line = minor) / "Yeah." I have no idea how this turned into "Makes sense."
6:51 - Context, Nuance(minor) / -"I hear", that line is her opinion.
7:44 - Error(minor) / "I feel sick."
7:48+07:53 - Error(minor) / "You'll feel better after throwing up." + "I hate throwing up." Hard to believe, but it's probably a way to feel better for track teams?
8:00 - I've had enough of this. Let's just multiply the errors by 3.

[Nishishi]
3:08 - Context(arguable) / "She has so many colors." Same girl.
18:37 - Detail(minor) / "it won't bleed or hurt from festering."
19:57 - Error(minor, important line) / "No matter how painful it is, I'll never truly get hurt!"

[niconico]
0:46 - Error(arguable) / "sky of blue" -> "blue sky." Not talking about the color yet.
5:51 - Literal(negligible) / "Are you going to join any clubs?" + "Which one?"
7:18 - Scriptwriting(minor) / Unnecessary scriptwriting.
7:20 - Error(minor) / "Charge!" 飛び出せ != 飛べ
20:32 - Error(minor, important line) / Why drop "colors" here?

[CSS]
0:46 - Error(arguable) / "sky of blue" -> "blue sky." Not talking about the color yet.
1:05 - Error / "The sea reflects the blue of the sky."
6:02 - Literal(minor) / "Are you going to join any clubs?"
7:28 - Scriptwriting(minor) / Unnecessary scriptwriting.
7:30 - Error(minor) / "Charge!" 飛び出せ != 飛べ
12:38 - Missing line
20:32 - Style, Logic(minor) / Why drop "colors" here?
21:29 - Missing line(major, important line) / Double penalty here.