Entry #9: Realization.

Entry #9: Realization

Characters - [25]
Not much description was given to the characters themselves in terms of personality, but the situation itself gives a nice depiction of the emotions the Trainer and his Pokemon were experiencing. I would consider the Trainer a character in the same right I would a Fairytale protagonist, in that a lot of the specifics aren't given, but his/her character is defined by the now, rather than the then. With that said, from what I could gather, the pair seem to work in contrast to one another: The Trainer's cautions and worried demeanor throughout the story, with them being out at night, while snowing no less, and the apparent danger that posed on top of probability of running into wild Pokemon, meshes well with his Pokemon's more carefree, almost childlike depiction. The fact that the Turtwig jumped right in front of its Trainer upon the Weavile making their intentions known, and the reaction the Trainer had upon seeing his ally fall, to me, shows that despite them just becoming partners, they truly did share a bond.

You captured very well the thoughts that run through one's own mind when in a foreign area, with limited resources and means of protecting oneself.

Setting/Imagery - [20]
The atmosphere presented in this story was quite chilling and truly gives the reader a picture of a peaceful, yet ominous winter's night. You managed to convey a feeling of ascending dread as the story continued and once the reveal of the threat that approach them was fully realized, the picture you painted with the final lines of text is quite haunting, with the vague, yet likely implications of it.

Creativity/Originality - [25]
A very ominous and tragic take on "The First Battle," concept. I feel that it shows that not all battles only have the Trainer's pride at stake, and can end with just a few cuts and bruises on their Pokemon. Another interesting element of this story is that you chose to leave out dialogue in favor of pure narration, which is a bold move, due to the writer then having to depend completely on their descriptive skills to move the story along, and explain the who, hows, and whys of the tale. Very good work!

Grammar/Spelling - [10]
You did well with your grammar and I saw no mistakes in spelling.