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  1. I saw a couple of chapters months ago, but I haven't actually read one from start to finish. At most I skimmed through it skipping some paragraphs too and/or done some quick-reading. However, I did like the duels. The interaction between Speed World - X and the terrains is really cool. I kinda reminds me of the Duelist Kingdom's rules and it also allows interesting developments as shown in the first few duels... That Orichalcos field spell was definitely attention grabbing. The Bulldozer was something new, too.
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  3. Now then, there is something I'd like to mention, that is borderline nitpicking and borderline legit.
  4. I was wondering if you had some kind of beef against male duelists.
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  6. I mean, I get that the protagonists are all girls and due to their status as main characters, they'll enjoy victories more often than not, but I feel like there is some kind of clause in their iron-clad contracts that makes them unable to lose against duelists of the opposite sex, and that bugs me a little. I get that throughout YGO history, female duelists have been mistreated by the writers and it's actually refreshing when a fanfic has female characters getting the spotlight, but I have the feeling you're doing this at the expense of destroying the credibility of every male duelist in the world you've created... which is not so different from what the anime series does every time.
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  8. The guys aren't just defeated, they're pwned, humilliated, stripped of their pride... Here women are badasses, witty, and men are simpletons, scrubs who are made look like fools at every turn and they don't really stand out from each other.
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  10. The last chapter, chapter 7, was proof of that mistreatment of male duelists (?). In a single chapter we saw three different guys being defeated agaist female ones. Looks like the iron-clad contract has a retroactive clause for flashbacks, too.
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  12. Don't take this the wrong way. I do like your main cast, especially Eula and her deck which fits her like a glove. The majority of the original cards are pretty good, too, especially the ace monsters of the protagonists. The plot itself is slowly but surely shaping into something interesting, it seems. I repeat, I haven't read it all attentively, yet.
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  14. I hope my complaint doesn't sound too abrasive. I can understand it a little since not many chapters have been published and the story is still during its initial stages.
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  16. Well, good luck.[/spoiler]
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