storry

The first few paragraphs were enough to make me not want to keep reading. There's a new name or place or word that I don't yet understand dropped every sentence, it feels like, and it's just a fact dump, no insight into what the PoV character is thinking about these things. There are also a lot of typos, odd sentence structures, and commas that make it difficult to read and parse. I'm not sure what's happening, besides the fact that this guy is falling, and he's using the time he's in the air to waffle on to himself about things I don't and can't yet care about. I think that the first scene needs to be rewritten, if not replaced, with more effort being put into what a reader would think about the things being brought up with no other knowledge of the setting. I don't know what Principality is, I don't know what the Republic is, I don't know who King Josef Mar is, I don't know who the Black Knight it, I don't know what the Dynasty is, I don't know who this "self-proclaimed unequaled magician of the Dynasty" is, I don't know what Regeneration and Aura are in this context, or why they're inconsistently capitalized. I don't know what a hit area is. I don't know what a 'level' means in the setting. I don't know what this artifact swordfish is. I don't know what 8 Thousand Woes poison is. Or artifact armor. Or why this guy's umbrella is important. It took me halfway through the chapter to realize that Josef and the PoV character were the same person. The last sentence "What did just happen?" is not correct english. It should be "What just happened?"