Proofreading for Chapter Eleven

The largest group [b]was[/b] three of the Elements of Harmony, along with their sisters, and sisters’ friend.
An exaggerated pout, followed by batted lashes [b]trailing[/b] the question.
They parted at the market fountain, Applejack and Apple Bloom using the north road, while the [b]others[/b] took the south,
Confident in the natural flow of events, Rarity turned down the wide lane to her shop[b]; or ...[/b] Only to stop...
The second statement here was a dependent clause, and the mistake is made often; it can be easy to miss.
Taking a fresh sheet of stationery out of her desk, she settled herself with her wine[b],[/b] delightfully dry as it lingered on the tongue.
Semicolons separate clauses in place of a conjunction. They usually imply going further by separating parts of the sentence with different matters.
There, a boat waited to take the carriage’s passengers to an old third-rate ship-of-the-line[b]:[/b] the Bellerophon
They had just finished filling their stores with casks of rum, lemons, beats, dried biscuits, and salt beef[b]:[/b] salt beef being a peculiar slushy gruel unique to the navy, known for its bitter taste and lumpiness if improperly cooked, and [s]was[/s] the staple diet of the sailor, found nowhere else in Equestria.
Another dependent clause.
Along with him came his own first lieutenant, surgeon, steward, coxswain and almost a quarter of the crew from his previous command[b]:[/b] over a hundred assorted seamares...
Unlike the royal guard, the marines didn’t wear barding[b];[/b] instead they wore heavy cotton uniforms with a sabre at their side.
“[b]We're[/b] a transporting a princess, girls,”
“We have put together a suite of cabins just forward there[b];[/b] we passed through them on our way in.
Twilight couldn't make heads [s]nor[/s][b]or[/b] tails of the operation as first one then the other anchor was run up to the bow.
Nor is only used with Neither. Not being used with Nor can actually negate the not, from my understanding.
One by one the sails were loosed, topgallants, topsails, and courses falling in rippling canvas waves[b];[/b] their bellies filled by the stiffening breeze,
Dependent Clause.
The wails and [b]howls of[/b] the dead
An endless maze-like complex[b];[/b] the City of the Damned was continually shifting[b];[/b] entire districts vanishing into the never ending night,
A few semi-colons to clear up the sentence.
In the center, hung from thick chains, a bed that took up half the room .
From inside the [b]latter[/b] came the gentle morose tinkling of a wind-up music box.
A knife or claw had torn and ripped the [b]canvas[/b],
I’ll warn you this once[b]:[/b] be careful around father, he is not the alicorn you banished here all those millennia ago.”
Zeus [b]cringed[/b] at the sight of the wound.
His beautiful niece, Authea, how he longed to see her again, [b]to[/b] hold her to his chest along with her half-sisters,
The old alicorn cracked a smile as he [b]remembered[/b] Authea’s infectious happiness
Singing[b].[/b] (Directly after the break)
It wasn’t the kind of singing of ponies, with upbeat melodies and chorus lines where an entire town would spontaneously start dancing[b]:[/b] one of the most peculiar and odd sights Gilda
Tenochdeerlan had called them the Cecuiztli Tepopoloani Tepetl[b]:[/b] Ice Death Mountains[b];[/b] while the buffalo named them the Tkineeha Dzil.