BAD

> SCP-1275 is to be contained in its original location of discovery.

Which is where, exactly?

> Building locked down by the SCP Foundation until further notice.

Oh, it's in Building! I love that plce.

> No civilians are to enter the building at any time.

Kinda goes without saying, doesn't it? We aren't exactly in the habit of letting dudes wander around containment zones.

> SCP-1275's door is to be kept shut by several different locking mechanisms.

A bit too vague. When I read the containment procedures for a keter object, I kinda have to know if these are super duper electronic locks, or the shitty one I left on my gym class locker.

> No personnel under Level 4 are authorized to enter SCP-1275 for any reason.

This is pointless.

> Steel reinforcements on SCP-1275's door are to be replaced monthly weekly.

Wut

> Any reports of strange events happening in the building or near SCP-1275 are to be reported directly to Site 144's administrator, Dr. Brecker, immediately.

> bad self-insert is bad.

> Description: SCP-1275 is a school locker (Locker #1275)

Hurrah for pointless details!

> residing at ██████ Elementary School in ███████, Virginia.

The word you want is "located"

Inside SCP-1275 is what appears to be a large abandoned medical facility.

> Wait what

> The amount of remains found on the floor indicate SCP-1275 may have other entrances and exits into the real world, though none have yet to be found.

No wait, time out, I'm still wondering why locker leads to evil hospital. Also, leaping to conclusions here, don'tcha think?

> The medical facility resides in SCP-1275-1's pocket dimension, much like SCP-106.

Which one is 1275-1 now?

> From observing the windows of SCP-1275, it is concluded that the facility is the only solid matter in pocket dimension for miles.

I can hear the ghost of a hiker screaming //"metric...metric"//

> Upon entering, the locker will close itself locking the subject inside. As the subject advances further into the medical facility, he/she will be start to be followed by SCP-1275-1.

The //mysterious// undefined part of the scip

> All sightings of SCP-1275-1 have reported it looks very close to the appearance of a male dentist.

OH GOD NOT A DENTIST

> When the anomaly attacked D-2324, researchers noted that the video showed that it had fully functional drills for teeth and fingertips.

2SPOOKY4ME

> SCP-1275-1 prefers to torture its victim to death with dentist tools, before liquifying their flesh in its mouth. D-2324 was tortured to death with dentist equpipment by SCP-1275-1 before dieing. After D-2324 died the camera stayed on to show the entity devouring him. Test subject was completely devoured within 3 minutes of his demise.

That's so OTT it's comical


> Recovery Notes: In 2003, a student named ███████ █████, 9, reported to school administrators that there was "A man in his locker."

I thought it only appeared if you waited around inside...

> School administrators and students who saw SCP 1275 were [DATA EXPUNGED] by SCP officials. The students and teachers were then relocated to a nearby school.

They were [EXPUNGED], [REDACTED] hard.



I can go on, but I don't feel I need to. This is a weak concept with exceedingly poor execution. I //highly// reccomend showing other people your drafts and listening to their advice before posting.