**00:15 - Context and sentence structure.  / See notes
07:34 - Error(negligible) / "no, {OR I mean,}" not "and"
*08:30 - Literal Error (minor) / I know their weapons resemble those two, but "carrying a spear and a sword" sounds silly. It simply means "armed/equipped with weapons".
*12:02 - Nuance(minor) / "just" is pretty bad there. Could remove or go with "I wanted to [...] one day."
*14:29 - Context (minor) / No context, "... is half to blame"
**15:07 - Literal Error / "I couldn't even get a glimpse of her."
**18:39 - Context / "Wouldn't they sell out then?"