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- For timing reference if needed, in my ddream the first note falls on 1.467.
- 1.467 to 11.173
- I see no reason to not follow the pr with the freezes completely going with 4321, making this freeze note 4.
- About the 16th stream notes, I know you start it halfway through to reflect the rising volume, but that doesn't work so well when the sound is so continuous, so I recommend either starting it from the first note or ignoring it completely.
- Additionally, the stream notes should make jumps alongside the beginning of freeze notes too.
- It kinda sucks with 3 columns, but try to incorporate some vague PR by clustering groups of notes following the same sound with repeated patterns.
- 12.055 and 12.408
- It's more intuitive to make 12.055 a jump, extend the previous hold up to 12.408 and include the corresponding hold follow up on 12.408.
- Cutting the 16th stream was a good choice.
- 13.026
- For consistency, this note in 13.026 should only be included if you layer in the hihat consistently in 12.938, 13.291, 13.379 etc.
- It's technically present in every 16th but a x.xx rhythm (like if you included notes in the timestamps I mentioned) works better. You can differentiate the weaker ones like 13.379 by not forcing minijacks.
- It's fine to ignore it when it mixes up with stronger sounds like 13.644, although it's also possible to take a '1 arrow per sound' approach to layer it in situations like that.
- 13.732
- The synth that goes on 12.761, 13.114, 13.467, 13.996 and so on is the main hook of this section so you definitely don't want to ignore it here in 13.732.
- 13.820 to 13.996
- Those dumped 24ths don't add much and don't go to anything in particular (that weird vocal-like sound would extend up to 14.173, and would also warrant a similar treatment over 12.761 to 13.114 at least).
- 13.996 to 15.408
- After commiting to the clap sound in the 3 note jack in 13.644, it feels really strange to change the layering scheme completely on 13.996 to ignore its sound like in 13.996, 14.438, 14.879 and 15.144.
- Instead of simply making all synth notes jumps and ignoring the rest, try to build a more complete layering from 13.996 to 15.408, possibly including both clap and hihats.
- 15.585 to 22.467
- Should be essentially a repetition of 12.761 to 15.408 layering wise, aside maybe from accenting the proeminent hihat starting on 18.585 to reflect the gradual build up.
- 22.467 to 23.349
- If you want to focus on the new sound by only layering it as jumps, it's better that you remove the starting freeze and make 23.261 a jump.
- 23.349
- It probably better to include a freeze here as the only sound that differentiate this quad from the hand at 23.879 is that fading buzz thingy.
- 23.879 and 24.055
- These two hands should be different to reflect changing sounds
- 24.055 to 46.291
- Your layering approach here is closer that what should've been done in the previous section if you swap the clap with the bass.
- The jack usage is generally fine, so I won't comment on that directly. Now to other specifics, noting I might not list repetitions of the same thing:
- 24.144 and most 16ths right after 4ths
- These only make sense if you are following the non-stop melody or percussion, so you shouldn't have rests in places like 24.849, 25.379 or any other 16ths unless you _really_ want to put emphasis in something.
- In any case, I think it's good to include them as an explicit build up from the previous section.
- 25.644, 28.467, 31.291...
- Undifferentiated synth hit
- 29.173, 29.349, 32.173...
- Undifferentiated percussion
- 27.232 to 27.585
- Considering there are actual 32nds right after, it's better to differentiate using a different rhythm to dump that sound (e.g. 24ths).
- 31.555
- Disregard what I said about having continuous 16ths, this is fine like this.
- 46.644 to 52.291
- Not a big fan of using mines like that but it's acceptable
- 52.291 to 74.879
- I don't mind dumping 24ths and 32nds to the vocals, but be consistent about it in two ways:
- -Use exclusively higher than 16ths rhythms to represent them, otherwise it becomes a confusing mess over the other instruments;
- -Be consistent about it by including it over all (or most) vocal hits;
- -Be careful to not make it the main source of difficulty in a non-jacky way.
- That would affect all the layering of this section so I won't spend much time pointing what is currently done.
- My suggestion for layering up to 63.585 would be focusing on bass as jumps (e.g. 52.291, 52.820, 53.349, 53.879, 54.055...), clap as hands (e.g. 54.408) and ignoring the continuous 16th stream.
- After that you could mix up the hihat 16ths (e.g. 64.467 to 64.644) as 3 note jacks.
- Given the context of the jax pack, I recommend trying to pattern the dumped 24ths so to force a lot of 12th jacks either through trills or by 'clashing' with the layered jumps/hands.
- 74.879 to 86.173
- See previous note about dumping the vocals.
- For the sake of making it easier so to fit the music, it might be better to ignore vocals and simply follow the continuous 16th stream in this section.
- Alternatively, considering how continuous the vocal is, 24th trills might be good too. For the sake of jax, trills would be great actually.
- 86.173 to 93.232
- See previous note about dumping the vocals.
- Additionally, do make use of the claps in the layering to induce those 3 note jacks (e.g. 87.055 to 87.232).
- 93.232 to 94.644
- 16ths only make sense to the continuous stream, so either remove them or include in every 16th gap.
- 97.467 to 120.055
- Your approach here is generally ok but, besides what I mentioned about dumping (which is fine to ignore a bit given how heavy the section is), I need to point out two things:
- -Rework various ghost jumps (e.g. 97.732, 98.085...) and missing jumps (e.g. 102.055, 102.232, 102.761...);
- -98.702 to 99.585 and repetitions don't really warrant these jacks or even all those jumps. Particularly bad when you consider that all the other jacks are more or less justifiable.
- 120.055 to end
- Repetition of a section I already covered.
- And for a last remark, regardless of what I said in my review, the main motif of the chart (i.e. section starting on 24.055, repetitions and variations) is pretty nice and fits in my pack.
- Because of this, I'll ask you to make sure that:
- -It's ~feeling~ is not lost after making changes;
- -The rest of the chart doesn't steal the spotlight either by excessive difficulty or density.
- And pls fill the metadata in the .sm properly.
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