[caption #3]
Wedge: Relax. The Slave Crown on her head makes her a mindless puppet. She'll follow orders.

(It should be "The thing on her head", in the original japanese and the GBA script they don't specify the object on
her head.)

[caption #8]
Can it be that those in power are on the verge of repeating a senseless and deadly mistake?

(In a personal opinion it should be "on the verge of repeating the same mistake all over again...?",
the "senseless and deadly mistake" is never mentioned in the japanese and GBA scripts, i don't get if you left it because it's a "woosleyism" or similars,
Tomato explained it very vaguely in his livestreams.)

[caption #41]
Locke: I prefer the term "treasure hunting"!
Old Man: Ha! That's the same thing...
Locke: Tsk, tsk... There's a huge difference!

(In the japanese script "tsk, tsk" has an exclamation point, so it should be "tsk, tsk!" instead of three points)

[caption #155]
Chancellor: Witness the glory of Figaro! No one can bring harm to our people!

The Japanese line here is rather strange; he goes on at some length about witnessing the majesty of the castle as it dives into the glorious golden ocean of the desert.  It sounds… pretty goofy.

(The japanese line is translated as "Behold/Witness the bravery figure of figaro, diving into the great golden ocean!",
this made me thought if you heard wrong what tomato said in his livestreams or in his notes, had a problem with the language or had a problem with fitting the lines.)

(Battle caption)
[caption #188]
Locke: MAGIC?!
She used magic?
(Another problem that i've come across it's the battle dialog when you use magic the first time, the text dosen't scroll down when locke says "M-M-MAGIC!?"
I can't understand if you had problem with the battle dialog text space or you forgot that thing.)