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  2. Scene by scene analysis. (second version)
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  4. Yeah that's right don't open up with a nice slow beginning you lazy piece of shit.
  5. Instead show me that purple dragon ass jolting around from left to right.
  6. Oh great he's dressed as a dragon, that's definitely a good sign... to confirm they're keeping the parody attitude.
  7. 00:06 - That's a really shitty flat-looking background. It looks plastered on the screen like they couldn't understand depth of field.
  8. The staircase especially looks bad. I see they updated the tree's floor with some ugly looking Paint background, which doesn't fit with the aesthetic of the characters.
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  10. Usually directors open their movies with a slow panning view of the whole city and only then focus on the characters within them.
  11. They could have opened at dawn time Canterlot showing Luna talking to Celestia and showing her lowering the sun to make way for the moon. A proper intro to the events that will transpire. Instead Luna appears at the 8 minute mark and the episode doesn't even focous on her perspective, instead it happens from Twilight's perspective like this is Twilight's episode instead of Luna's.
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  13.  
  14. >Spike: Ugh, come on, Twilight. We're gonna be late for the Nightmare Night festival.
  15. Exposition dump within the first seconds. Not a good sign.
  16. 00:13 - Royal trumpets, background+sparkles
  17. You stop that now. Stop.. I said stop it. I hate those obnoxious dream-like backgrounds. Especially when used in Sisterhooves Social.
  18.  
  19. >I'm Starswirl the bearded. Father of the amniomorphic spell? Did you even read that book I gave you about obscure unicorn history?
  20. Second exposition dump, which isn't even related to the plot. No... Starswirl was a she, a female, a pink n blue pony mare.
  21. No this isn't funny, it's a very shitty joke. Am I being literal enough? Just look at Spike's reaction, if it isn't funny for the characters inside the show then why would it be funny to the viewer?
  22. This joke also gets taken seriously and turned into a real thing in episode 20 "It's About Time". Very retarded of them to do that.
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  24. 00:36 - 00:39 Too fast you incompetent director. You have Twilight swirling around, Spike opening the door and reacting and the fillies singing within just 3 to 4 seconds. Slow the fuck down, cause it makes your cartoon look like it's put on fast forward.
  25.  
  26. >Fillies: Nightmare Night! What a fright! Give us something sweet to bite!
  27. You'd expect some more imagination when considering the Hallow's Eve version of a magical girly fantasy world. Otherwise it's just our own Halloween with no differences. Bobbing for apples, pumpking throwing, throwing toy spiders?? add some more unique things instead, something horse related, cutsie and DnD-ish all at the same time.
  28. >Not giving them sugarcubes
  29. Who do I have to kill to finally see these horses eating some legit sugar?
  30. >Pipsqueak falls straight on his face. (what no Jack Sparrow impersonation and rope jumping?)
  31. So much for his first intro. Oh and by the way... OMG IT"S A POUND PUPPY, so cute.
  32. He even has a british voice... which he later loses it. I wonder who voiced this little faggot.
  33. >Trottingham, Hoofington, Manehattan, Fillydelphia.
  34. Never liked ponified city names. Even if they were to visit them, they wouldn't add anything to the world design except for generic city
  35. inside the magical cutsie girl world. Cloudsdale and Canterlot makes sense for pegasi and unicorns, the everfree forest too for earth ponies, but generic cities...
  36.  
  37. >Pinkie Pie
  38. God she's fucking obnoxious. She's even dressed as a chicken to represent her cuckoo personality.
  39. >Enough chit-chat. Time is candy!
  40. That's not what Pinkie Pie would say. Neither with such a dramatic superficial way. Shithead.
  41. >Too old for free candy? Never!
  42. Still wrong characterization you moron. Also covering half her face in that retarded shit-taste costume only makes it look like your animators can't understand expressions, or don't want to animate expression.
  43. When I think of Pinkie Pie and ponies in general I think of some really happy cute faces who are glad to see you. Not some obnoxious dramatic cunts shoved in my face.
  44.  
  45. 1:28
  46. >Twilight Do you like it? *ring ring ring ringa-ding*(bells sfx)
  47. No, you look retarded. Now take it off.
  48. >Yeah! Great costume, Twilight! You make a fantastic ... (insult)
  49. 1:33 Too early with the disappointed face there you lazy animator. Pinkie said good things before she called her a weird clown.
  50. 1:37 Yuck, tweened animation.
  51. >These are hoof-stitched
  52. Which means jackshit considering hooves are horrible for dexterity. Also she never said who stitched them, Twilight or Rarity? So probably Twilight meant home-made and unprofessional, as opposed to the opposite. Hence the costume's dress has no form.
  53. Hue hue so funny that nobody likes her costume, excellent taste in humour my friend. Maybe with a generous dose of vodka I'd laugh... too bad I'm already drunk to a pulp. Get rid of that joke till I don't crash in your studio with a soviet tank.
  54. 1:50 Intro - What... no special Nightmare Night intro? No Luna intro? Lazy bastards. God those synth pads on the guitar are annoying.
  55.  
  56. Overall that was a shitty one and a half minute opening.
  57. >2:26 Mooaaann
  58. That screech, moan, whatever the fuck you call that. Is a sound effect recycled from episode 2 of season 1. Most of the nightmare moon theme here is recycled if only... they didn't edit it to sound poorer and less villainous.
  59.  
  60. >Twilight: Exposition, exposition, exposition, exposition, exposition, exposition
  61. Shut the fuck up, nerd. I'm trying to listen to the background music and I can't fucking do it with those dick-sucking purple lips of yours bitching over it, you fucking bitch. I swear on me mum, if that stupid joke you keep forcing down my throat is gonna become canon, then I'm gonna travel back in time and I'm going to throw you in a different world through a door portal, you hear me Vogel? You gay piece of shit. Thank you Larson, thank you IDW, for making Starswirl a shit reality.
  62.  
  63. So let's pay attention to the background. We have pony candy skulls, bg ponies dressed as lions, bees, vikings, witches. The usual run-of-the mill costumes. I think BigMac's costume is a reference to something. Those two baking ponies from Sugarcube Corner, their costumes, Mr. and Mrs's Cake costumes is a reference to those two ugly dolls, Raggedy Ann and Andy. (Were they always called Mr and Mrs. Cake?! I thought they had better names than that... same for "The Mayor" pony.)
  64. I kinda liked the props used in the episode even if they're flat looking. I didn't love them though. I only wish the characters would interact more with the actual background or make it come into attention.
  65. Yeah dance blue egyptian pony, you show em how it's done, move dem hooves back n forth, n back n forth, it's like she's doing yoga, rather than dancing. Oh god that knight pony, a spiked mace for a prehensile pony tail, I'd hate to fuck around with that bastard. I could see these costumes turning alive by Luna's magic and all the ponies turn into their respective monsters.
  66. Aw shit Carrot Top is dressed as the devil, she even has a pointy demon tail. Fitting cause carrots = dicks, Lucifer means party means /b/... and they say MLP doesn't have subliminal satanic messages. Awww yeaaahh MLP is the devil's spawn, that's how it spawned bronies, ah god I love this fandom.
  67. >Twilight: Don't you Spike?
  68. Sorry what were you saying? I was paying attention to the active background, you know the actual important stuff for a cartoon.
  69. Why can't you just have fun like a normal pony, Twilight?
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  71. 2:44, 2:26. That's 20 seconds and only about 2 shots of Ponyville, 3 with the last one. Could use more eagle-view shots. Or ye know... actually write Twilight as enjoying the festivities rather than sperging about some bullshit nobody cares about.
  72. That's another red X mark on ruining the characterization. And this is really important, this is suppose to be a fun special holiday episode with MLP flavor. You can't fuck up their characterizations at a time like this!!
  73. >Should we get something to eat?
  74. Yes please. Actual enjoyable filler is better than you sperging around about your non-problems.
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  76. >Pinkie Pie
  77. Oh hey, it's you. Still as in your face as ever, and now you're... eating like a chicken, yeah just peck away, peck away my hopes and dreams you bloody stereotype.
  78. >Pinkie Pie: And then we went to Cheerilee's house, didn't we? And then (blah blah blah)
  79. Yeah again yet another character with blah blah dialogue you're not suppose to listen to. Instead you're suppose to pay attention to the background for more easter eggs and stuff going on. Which is ironic cause MLP was known for having a lot of good eloquent dialogue, especially between all 6 characters.
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  81. Hah. Spike is fainting the moment the thunder strikes, never noticed that. I'd thought they'd be lazy again and skip it.
  82. I don't understand why the kids got scared, and then followed Pinkie Pie. The kids should have stood their ground like smart children.
  83. Rainbow Dash is at least back to her prankster self and doesn't blahblah talk like a retard. I like the animation on her hooves.
  84. So a shadowbolt costume rather than a wonderbolt one, weird. I just don't like those stitches, makes it look cheap on purpose.
  85. Damn Rainbow Dash is a sociopath. I guess they never learned their moral in the griffon episode that pranks can kill. They were too busy saying that pranks are good as weapons against shitty people. I agree.
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  87. 3:37
  88. Yay, I can finally see the background clearly without any character blocking the screen. Helpful for anyone tracing the backgrounds. Too bad it only lasts a few seconds. Good thing nobody uses TV anymore, pause time. (You're suppose to show a plethora of backgrounds, especially because these bgs are so cheap to make in Flash)
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  90. >Applejack
  91. C'mon don't tell me all of their costumes are gonna be stereotypical cheap shit which matches their personality.
  92. Speaking of costumes, you could just wear a pumpkin on your head and get it over with.
  93. >Applejack: Nice costume. (nice sultry voice, Ashleigh)
  94. >Thanks, I'm a dragon.
  95. Yeah, you're a dragon living among ponies, that's your whole character, your whole "thing". Poor son of a bitch.
  96. 4:00 Derpy is standing outside the apple tub, only to pop out of the apple tub in the next shot.
  97. Originally it was Rarity in Carrot Top's place. But Rarity has a deleted scene, so I guess they thought of not giving anymore background-kinda screentime to main characters if they're not gonna talk or be seen anymore. Just like Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie which appear in Boast Busters in the background for 1 scene and are never shown again.
  98. 4:07 Again! You need to slow the fuck down when it matters. Stop skipping transition seconds.
  99. They keep rushing to the next scene just as soon as they finish the first one. Add some after delay.
  100. 4:10 Sweet mother of God. They copy-pasted secondary characters, holy sweet spaghetti monster god.
  101. Look when we said add more unique background characters, we meant draw more original bg pony designs, not remove and replace them with secondary characters. Jesus.
  102. At least they fixed it as soon as Twilight n Spike get there. Yes again they just warped them there instantly.
  103.  
  104. >The legend of Nightmare Mooonn! ( Moooo?? Luna is a cow now? )
  105. Spike: Spooky voice might work better if she wasn't dressed like that. (Just like this parody of an episode and season)
  106. That wasn't even a spooky voice, that was a retarded ham-fisted voice. Sorry to break it to you, DHX & Mike Vogel, but even when you remove all your lol so funny jokes you still end up being a talentless substanceless writer and script editor. It's like the randumb jokes are the pile of horse shit trying to cover up a broken window.
  107. Oh look Zecora isn't dressed like a punk zebra nigger anymore, I guess secondary stereotypes are an exception to this episode's rule where every costume equals their stereotype.
  108. I almost heard My little demons, instead of my little dears.
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  110. >Follow me, and very soon,
  111. >you'll hear the tale of Nightmare Moon.
  112. >Listen close, my little dears,
  113. >I'll tell you where you got your fears
  114. >of Nightmare Night, so dark and scary.
  115. >Of Nightmare Moon, who makes you wary.
  116. >Every year, we put on a disguise,
  117. >to save ourselves from her searching eyes.
  118. Seems ok so far because I shortened it? Try actually listening to how it sounds while she talks.
  119. >Hungrily, she soars the sky. If she sees nopony, she passes by. So if she comes and all is clear, Equestria is safe another year!
  120.  
  121. Look at all those commas , , ,. And so on and so on. It doesn't flow worth a damn rotten shit. Also Zecora doesn't obsessively rhyme all the time. When she panics in Bridle Gossip and Swarm of the Century she actually talks like a normal intelligent being. Even I can rhyme without interrupting myself. Stop taking every facetious aspect of this cartoon and running with it bare-bones in an exaggerated manner, you lazy autistic canadians.
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  123. Zecora is attempting an african storytelling here, but it completely falls short because of poor wording and because this isn't how an african fire storytelling about evil spirits goes like.
  124. You need drum music, you need incantations and voodoo gifts, you need a circle, you need atmosphere.
  125. You especially need rhyming which isn't interrupted every single line by a random comma.
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  127. Also this scene is so hypocritical for Zecora considering Bridle Gossip.
  128. Why didn't they get the Mayor Pony to do it? Or Twilight, Rainbow Dash, anybody else. Luna in disguise? If Luna had told it herself then that would have been the best choice. Showing she's completely fine with this retarded celebration making fun of Nightmare Moon as a halloween prop.
  129. >That nightmare Moon statue
  130. That was never there before, did the ponies just add it for this occasion?
  131. Stop changing her design. She never had razor teeth in the first place. Also somebody needs to check her weight, Nightmare Moon's torso gets really big n fat in one shot. (the statue, not the ghost)
  132.  
  133. I forgot Applebloom, Scootaloo, Sweetie Belle were there. Weird how Pipsqueak gets to talk, but not the CmC.
  134. That glowy luminescent Nightmare Moon is getting annoying.
  135.  
  136. 6:04, 4:07, 00:36
  137. WHAT THE FUCK DID I JUST SAY? STOP. RUSHING. IT.
  138. One of the days I'll crush with a horse in your studio and make the horse kick you in the balls.
  139.  
  140. 6:13
  141. That's Nightmare Moon's theme from episode 2 inside the Old Royal Sisters castle, it can be heard exactly when Twilight is charging into Nightmare Moon and Twi winks out near the elements of harmony. After Nightmare zaps her(or the elements zap her) you can hear that moaning sound effect there.
  142. Sadly her original theme from her first appearance in episode 1 is nowhere to be heard in Luna Eclipsed. Too bad, it was the most good sounding part of her theme song too.
  143. I think Luna descending from the moon should have lasted longer, to show off more of the effects and the moon. Apparently Luna comes from the moon. They could have made her just descend from Canterlot, but the moon was more interesting. And unclear as hell because we don't know where she's been this whole season. The moon or canterlot? inside Canterlot's mountain in a castle?
  144. The chariot pulled by two pegasi reminds me of Twilight in the first episode.
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  146. 6:18 Yeah that's right zoom in on the bat guards. Only to never give them anymore screentime, let alone dialogue lines.
  147. Would have been useful to know if they're natural bat-winged pegasi or just unicorn enchanted like Rarity's butterfly wings.
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  149. >Pinkie: It's Nightmare Moon, run!!
  150. Again in my fucking face you piece of shit. That's what... the third time she spazzed out so far?
  151. Weird how Zecora is running. Unimaginable how anyone is following what this cuckoo buffoon is saying.
  152. 6:30 Oh god I can hear Pipsqueak barking, he really is a pound puppy sent to Equestria in disguise.
  153. Also that is one fat Nightmare Moon statue, stop giving her candy.. Oh my god oh shit, the candy disappeared. The statue ate the candy. Fat ass statue eating the candy while nobody's looking.
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  155. 6:34 (ooohhhh) I have no idea how to put that SFX into letters.
  156. My first thoughts are: Le ebin special effects.
  157. Shitty white avatar eyes, black silhouette, cheesy lightning. (Why so crappy?)
  158.  
  159. 6:34
  160. But Luna's face here is very interesting considering the one leaked image we had before this episode aired.
  161. In the leaked image it shows what looks like the original S1 design Luna, without the stupid black silhouette and white eyes to completely cover her up.
  162. Considering how many changes a script goes through even to the point of entire deleted scenes, like those storyboards where Rarity was next to Derpy bobbing for apples. Like the deleted scene in which Rarity dresses up Luna in pink, then Luna rips the dress off.
  163. I'd say that in the original pre-modified script for Luna Eclipsed, Princess Luna's design was unchanged. Hell maybe they even had a few entirely different designs ready before agreeing on the final one.
  164. I wonder who we have to thank for all these sudden last minute script edits.
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  166. 6:44
  167. Animate those hooves you lazy tweening faggots. I bet everytime they have hovering pegasi, these new animators just end up using the tween option in Flash.
  168. Luna jumping from her chariot could be animated better. At the very least they animated the edges on her cape.
  169. The whole scene otherwise is very obnoxious and try-hard.
  170. 6:55 Ughhh... thick long girrafe neck. Darkened ink blue shade. The eyes are different, they don't even fit inside the shape of her own eye, yet at the same time the eyes are too small. Celestia used to have this, but her inner eye was custom tailored to suit her shape. 7:00 Princess Luna! yes thanks for name dropping her for anyone who forgot who this random important pony was.
  171. 7:02 Oh you did not just do that, my minion. Slap him ass, levitate him and throw him at Luna herself.
  172. If my own assistant tried to silence me you'd be seeing missing posters for months. I'd torture that little dragon fucker...
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  174. 7:06 JESUS, that's one big ugly bastard. That head shape. That camera angle. I'd be shitting my pants too if this giga-nigger motherfucker came up at me with that angry rape face. God what the fuck did they do to her design. She looks like Tyrone, the pony.
  175. I was so busy with her face that I forgot the bats. I like her cape made out of bats though, too bad she doesn't keep it. Instead the ponies like Twilight and Spike should drop the stupid effortless costumes so I can see my favourite horses on screen properly.
  176.  
  177. 7:13 I really wouldn't use a glockenspiel bell sfx when this manly nigger princess is giving me a rape face.
  178.  
  179. Ok the time you've been waiting for has finally arrived. All that le epin preparation surely must lead to something amazing and grand. This is Celestia's twin sister and the villain Nightmare Moon. Her very first introduction must be amazing.
  180. Let's hear Luna's stunning new voice and the charming interesting things she has to say.
  181.  
  182. >Princess Luna: [booming voice] Citizens of Ponyville! We have graced your tiny village with our presence, so that you might behold the real Princess of the Night!
  183. God she's so arrogant.
  184. >A creature of nightmares no longer, but instead a pony who desires your love and admiration! Together we shall change this dreadful celebration into a bright and glorious feast!
  185. That's what she's trying to accomplish with all this obnoxious lightning and thunder and rape faces? At least if it was a soothing hocus pocus entrance with singing, a subtle spiritual side of her character told from her perspective. Then yeah I guess that could work, but as it is she's the most unappealing retard, especially for viewers.
  186. >Pinkie Pie: Did you hear that, everypony? Nightmare Moon says she's gonna feast on us all!
  187. >Princess Luna: [normal voice] What? No, children, no! You no longer have reason to fear us! Screams of delight is what your princess desires, not screams of terror! [stomps hoof] Madame Mayor, thy Princess of the Night hath arrived.
  188. Screams of delight... right right. The stupid fucker who wrote this doesn't even know how that sounds like.
  189.  
  190. Mayor Mare: [gasp] Raven: [gasp]
  191. >Princess Luna: What is the matter with you? Very well, then. Be that way. We won't even bother with the traditional royal farewell.
  192.  
  193. That... was the introduction?! That was Princess Luna's introduction into the cartoon?...
  194. >Anon is smiling soullessly, the wide psychopathic smile on his face was just yelling "Does this look like the face of mercy?"
  195. You had one chance, one fucking chance.
  196. Luna.. instead of her american tomboy voice or any quality voice, gets a megaphone in place of a voice. She ends her rant with what sounds like a teenager Rarity. It doesn't sound elegant like Nightmare Moon's voice. It sounds like an obnoxious teen.
  197. Also what the fuck is up with the broken old english, it sounds retarded even for what it's trying to do. Nightmare Moon never had language problems, Nightmare Moon was eloquent and royal sounding as fuck. If they wanted something cool-sounding then they should have went for old latin, rather than this medieval English bullshit.
  198.  
  199. So the big bad spook doesn't want to be the main spook of her holiday. What is this? Jack Skellington?
  200. Why even add this superficial no-problem for the sake of it? This was suppose to be a halloween special where no minor plot challenges like "who to give the ticket to" weren't suppose to break the flow of this special episode. It was suppose to be a fun freeform/sandbox slice-of-life episode with no real problem, where everybody just has fun and we get to learn more about Luna's powers, where she lives, what she's been doing, her personality and how she interacts with the mane6. It doesn't even require a Halloween plot, speaking of which the episode doesn't feel like a holiday special at all, it might as well just been Luna's episode.
  201. Luna would just end up overshadowing the halloween episode, even if the episode was better written. They were lazy enough to not only make this a normal 20 minute episode, but a shitty one at that. Any other Halloween episodes of every other cartoon had some nice laidback chill writing with halloween spooks and ghosts, but apparently not Mike Vogel's cartoon. Proud Family for example had the normal boring main character turn into a super hero for a limited time and it had a ghost poltergeist villain.
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