Darkvamper~♪~: Hey, so far I quite like the book
+Oberon King: thanks what part are you at?
Darkvamper~♪~: Faerynn silent steps spell and the knocking
Darkvamper~♪~: and that's why I'm sending you something
+Oberon King: ah sweet
+Oberon King: uh oh
+Oberon King: go on
Darkvamper~♪~: not a big thing, just my autistic stuff, but when you switch to that part, there is no continuity, the letter said anywhere in the next month. Without starting either a new chapter there, or more closely denoting the passage of time.
+Oberon King: it will be a new chapter
Darkvamper~♪~: And since they only seem to be a few days together at that point (or you need more continuity) it can be confusing
+Oberon King: i havent added where each chapter will be yet but i planned ti have one
Darkvamper~♪~: that all being said, I really like the writing style
+Oberon King: ty so much
Darkvamper~♪~: So don't mind my nitpicking, I'm very much ejoying the story in between tournaments ^^
+Oberon King: that means a lot
+Oberon King: im autistic as well
Darkvamper~♪~: So that's why Lionel is so relatable ^^
+Oberon King: Lionel written to have a social anxiety disorder but symptoms are similar to autism
Darkvamper~♪~: His high intelligence would imply aspergers rather than social anxiety, but then again, idk whether in your universe magical talent is linked to intelligence
+Oberon King: i talked with my partner about this a lot
+Oberon King: my partner is not diagnosied with but has a back issue similar to faelynn's knee problem
+Oberon King: lionel's upbringing left him socially isolated and alone with books and tutors and nannies.
+Oberon King: So, he might not be like this if he was riased differently
Darkvamper~♪~: hmm you're actually quite accurate with that, I have a nephew with social anxiety disorder, and thinking back to specific things you mentioned, it fits (but we all like to think the characters are a little like us)
+Oberon King: exactly
Darkvamper~♪~: Either way, so far I'm enjoying it ^^
+Oberon King: ty
Darkvamper~♪~: Btw do you know the writing prompts subreddit? You seem like the kind of person who would enjoy it
+Oberon King: i dont use reddit
Darkvamper~♪~: the writing prompt is a subreddit where people post titles with prompt, and there's quite a few writer's there, It's fun to read, or write for as a challenge
+Oberon King: we have that in the library room on ps too
Darkvamper~♪~: not on the same scale, and I still haven't figured out where to read respones
+Oberon King: in archive
Darkvamper~♪~: aha thanks
Darkvamper~♪~: Although I've got plenty to read atm
Darkvamper~♪~: Page 108, taking a break to fix food. (21.09 here)
Darkvamper~♪~: I have to admit, I'm impressed, I love the inventiveness of your magic system, not the latin, but how they play with physics.
Darkvamper~♪~: I'm only stopping because my stomage is protesting. If you ever publish this as a book / series, advertise it in the library, I'd buy it
+Oberon King: ty
+Oberon King: i cant belive you read over 100 pages :D
Darkvamper~♪~: Honestly this is slow for my count, because I was playing in the tournament rooms concurrently ^^ a lifetime of reading :p
Darkvamper~♪~: But seriously, idk if this is your first book or not, but it's good, your hero isn't stereotypical, nor is the main villain. The dynamic between characters is interesting, if a bit sappy on occasion (but that fits YA I suppose).
Darkvamper~♪~: And the world is interesting, I want to know more about it, like for example the enforcers, but also what is the extent of magic, is it purely elemental or can it be more practical, etc..
Darkvamper~♪~: But yeah, food first, then the last 50 pages :)
+Oberon King: it's not done yet and my partner and i have so much more planned!
+Oberon King: we have several series the universe on like 5 different continents