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Sci-fi Reviews

AlbertNorton Feb 14th, 2020 (edited) 87 Never
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  1. Reviews for the winter 2020 writing contest. Sci-fi edition.
  2. Awards will come after the reviews when all reviews are completed.
  3. --- Need to read
  4. MECHA startup - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1577661577895.pdf
  5. Demon Slayer - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1577920657146-0.pdf
  6. Children of the Doll Castle -Prototype- - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580387107852.pdf
  7. The Journal of Doctor Innes Norton Ward - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580508233636.pdf
  8. Archive: Seventeen - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580512124227.pdf
  9. Life's Work - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580540413866.pdf
  10. Aboard the Iliad - https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kXCIkzI-ytavi96LwNfkSgkVERpVL3M0/view
  11. Cydonian Breeze - https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580630438810.pdf
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  13. --- Need to Review
  14. Story About John - https://pastebin.com/vJKuhJkS
  15. Sayonara https://smuglo.li/a/src/1580529075665.pdf
  16. 星と僕と - With the Stars and I - https://pastebin.com/zW01pG0C
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  18. --- Completed
  19. 1: G'arleek - https://pastebin.com/K9Zv8LXr
  20. 2:
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  28. 1: G'arleek - https://pastebin.com/K9Zv8LXr
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  30. It would have been better if there was some content to go along with the poem. Perhaps a second verse about the world or maybe a bit more character development would have made for a better story. However, any submission is better than the alternative of no submission, so good job on taking the first steps towards a proper story.
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  33. 2: Story About John
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  35. This is most likely one of the better ways to handle an image board horror story. The sense of intrusion and loss of control was conveyed very well throughout the story, and the interactions between John and the computer really helped give this sense of helplessness. At many points the story felt disconnected and at times chaotic. This helped the story feel
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