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Proofreading Guide - Kirei Cake

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  1. So You Want to Be a Proofreader?
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  3. Proofreading is a bit like editing in most literary circles; not only do you correct grammar and syntax errors, but you also try to make the translation more readable and flow better, while preserving its original meaning.
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  5. Here is an example of a script you might come across while proofreading, taken from the 1st volume special of Tomodachi Game, here:
  6. http://i.imgur.com/v6c7Fyg.jpg
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  8. Note that it's helpful to follow along with the raws of any series you're proofreading!
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  11. Script Begins
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  14. I knew it, it's Ken-chan, it's been since elementary school!
  15. As expected of Ken-chan
  16. Nomura Hayato/ The best friend from elementary school. They were always together whenever they did anything...However, he never stood a change against me which made him the best 'peanut gallery'
  17. ...It's been a while, Ken-chan.
  18. I! like you, Ken-chan.
  19. Chigusa Kaede/ She was the cutest girl in the class. I was confessed several times, but I had no interest in girls at the time. I wouldn't mind going out with her now.
  20. You guys sure haven't changed at all.
  21. since elementary school
  22. Now there's just two left...
  23. Sooory, did I make you all wait?
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  26. Script Ends--
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  29. And here is what the final product looks like, with comments on why lines were changed. Note that the comments are for guide purposes only, no need to justify every one of your edits in your test.
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  33. Proof Begins
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  36. I knew it, it's Ken-chan, it's been since elementary school!
  37. I knew it, it's Ken-chan! It's been since elementary school!
  38. [m] It felt more natural to break the sentence off in the middle, here.
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  40. As expected of Ken-chan
  41. As expected of Ken-chan!
  42. [m] Just adding some punctuation.
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  44. Nomura Hayato/ The best friend from elementary school. They were always together whenever they did anything...However, he never stood a change against me which made him the best 'peanut gallery'
  45. Nomura Hayato/ He was my best friend from elementary school. We were always together whenever we did anything... He never stood up against me which made him the best of my peanut gallery.
  46. [m] Since this is Ken's narration, he should be using "We," not "They." In addition, he isn't the entire peanut gallery, but just part of it. Another word that could've been used is fans or groupies, but we'll go with the translator's choice since it makes sense.
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  48. I! like you, Ken-chan.
  49. I... I like you, Ken-chan.
  50. [m] An elipses seemed more natural.
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  52. Chigusa Kaede/ She was the cutest girl in the class. I was confessed several times, but I had no interest in girls at the time. I wouldn't mind going out with her now.
  53. Chigusa Kaede/ She was the cutest girl in the class. I was confessed to several times, but I had no interest in girls back then. I wouldn't mind going out with her now.
  54. [m] Adding that "to" makes it grammatically correct, and changed "at the time" to emphasize that this is in Ken's past.
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  56. since elementary school
  57. Since elementary school.
  58. [m] Grammatical fixes.
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  61. Proof Ends
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  64. The standard format for proofreading is to /remove/ lines that you aren't changing, and make a /duplicate/ of lines you are changing, that is, keep the original line and make your corrected line below it. This is so the translator can quickly review the changes you've made.
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  66. If you're unsure of something or want clarification from the translator, you can add a "PR note" in brackets, which indicates it's not part of the translated text.
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  68. If you think you've got it, go ahead and get started! If you want a bit of practice, head over to this link here:
  69. http://pastebin.com/aTzey8r9
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  71. Or, if you want to see what a fully proofread chapter looks like, see here:
  72. http://pastebin.com/HSbXiiUj
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  74. And if you're wondering how to become a proofreader, go to http://kireicake.com/chat/ and ask Suwako, meterion, or anyone at the top of the chat list for a PR test. Best of luck!
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